Honestly, 1:25 felt like a bit of a let down after the big build. Returning to the same basic core beat pattern here really sucked the energy out of the section IMO. Overall, the core beat is repetitive throughout much of the track, with an occasional extra hit thrown in or the drums just suddenly dropping out. The double-time was a welcome change, but it soon regresses back to the core beat again after the buildup.
Overall mix is pretty clear, though I felt like the song had a general dull tone to it. Like the high end of the mix is toned down a bit too much. Minor nitpick there for me, though.
Nice incorporation of the original into your mix. The use of the original melody feels pretty laid-back and unpretentious, but I like it for this mix.
2:25 felt like it's retreading what we've already heard near the beginning of the track. The section at 3:07 also is very similar to an earlier section, with the same elements in play, but different lead writing. I think there's room for more development to keep things more fresh as the track progresses.
Definitely hearing the inspiration from VR in this track on the harmonized synth chords and even the beatwork in places. I've also taken inspiration from other tracks as well, but I always try to diversify myself much more than this to attempt a similar "feel" but never to the point where the listener would be tempted to say "hey he lifted this writing" from the original. I'll acknowledge there's a hefty amount of personal opinion in this and to be fair, this is by no means a copy of the VR track. Still, I'd recommend being very careful in how you incorporate your inspirations into your own music.
This is a good solid base you've put together here. Ultimately, I think this could be a go with more varied/exciting beat work and some more development in the writing. On a personal level, I'd like a bit more "space" between what's your writing and what's from VR's Lunar as well.
NO resubmit please