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#1 BrandonPerryMusic

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Posted 22 April 2012 - 11:21 PM

https://www.box.com/.../1/f_2087338905

It's not very long but again, it's a work in progress. I'm not sure whether it would be considered a dirge or a requiem, depends on whom it is addressed too I guess.
This is my first "could be considered done" song, some feedback would be helpful :)

If that link doesn't work try this: http://profile.ultim...m/theunforgivn/

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Posted 24 April 2012 - 08:30 AM

I'm writing a piece that I titled a dirge but what is the difference?

Also more on point do I need to have an account to view the song?

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Posted 24 April 2012 - 12:59 PM

I'm writing a piece that I titled a dirge but what is the difference?

Also more on point do I need to have an account to view the song?


No, you don't

#4 BrandonPerryMusic

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Posted 25 April 2012 - 12:30 PM

I'm writing a piece that I titled a dirge but what is the difference?

Also more on point do I need to have an account to view the song?


A dirge is like a funeral song, usually very somber. A requiem is a song usually dedicated to the dead
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Posted 26 April 2012 - 03:00 AM

I find requiems more religious than dirges.

However, it seems your song is still a WIP because you took it down. :P
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#6 BrandonPerryMusic

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Posted 26 April 2012 - 12:59 PM

I find requiems more religious than dirges.

However, it seems your song is still a WIP because you took it down. :P


It's still up, try this link: https://www.box.com/...07731025d334ea3
If that doesn't work try this:http://profile.ultim...m/theunforgivn/
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Posted 26 April 2012 - 08:07 PM

It's really good, I like the progression! What samples and daw did you use?

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Posted 26 April 2012 - 10:41 PM

It's really good, I like the progression! What samples and daw did you use?


My friend had garageband so I just plugged in a keyboard and used grand piano, a string ensemble (both of which comes with garageband), and we downloaded and used a choir synth... Sorry I can't expound to much on it, my friend really took care of the garageband part. It was my first time working with MIDI so I just played the parts and watched him do his stuff on garageband.
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Posted 28 April 2012 - 08:07 PM

It would have been nice if the choir synth was more balanced with the piano, but it sounds good so far. :)
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Posted 08 May 2012 - 05:36 AM

I like the sad feeling of this song. I also like that it's a piano arrangement.
You've got some good progressions going on here.
Not much that I can say is bad here, there are very few songs like this that I've critiqued that are badly composed.

You definitely know what you're doing. Is this song finished, or are you planning on adding more?

Either way, I like what is done. Keep it up! :)
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#11 BrandonPerryMusic

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Posted 08 May 2012 - 01:41 PM

I like the sad feeling of this song. I also like that it's a piano arrangement.
You've got some good progressions going on here.
Not much that I can say is bad here, there are very few songs like this that I've critiqued that are badly composed.

You definitely know what you're doing. Is this song finished, or are you planning on adding more?

Either way, I like what is done. Keep it up! :)


I'm going to try and continue with it.
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Posted 08 May 2012 - 06:25 PM

Good. I would love to see where this one goes. :)
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#13 BrandonPerryMusic

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Posted 20 June 2012 - 03:00 AM

I like the sad feeling of this song. I also like that it's a piano arrangement.
You've got some good progressions going on here.
Not much that I can say is bad here, there are very few songs like this that I've critiqued that are badly composed.

You definitely know what you're doing. Is this song finished, or are you planning on adding more?

Either way, I like what is done. Keep it up! :)


Thank you, and yes I plan on adding more, it's just that I'm thinking about what next to add. I've been working on my piano skills itself and not on composition lately. I'm thinking about a full out symphony for the next part or some sort of interlude. I'll keep in touch with you guys when I finish the piece.
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