Chill-Out BGM (wip) - Need Feedback!

[JoyBoy]

I started this just for fun and I thought about using it as a background music for something but I'm not sure if it's good enough? what do you guys think?
What do I need to spice it up more?

Feedback is always appreciated.

http://www.tindeck.com/audio/image/b/ieym (http://www.tindeck.com/audio/my/ieym/chillout-bgm)

[Cree`]

Soothing. Sounds good, except for the the right hand delayed piano. I'd mess around with the delay timing to see what u can come up with.

[vr_jadison]

The first things to say - that may seem unimportant but actually IS important - is, that this song does not bug the listener nor goes on his nerves. And: It could be from a sequence of a film or else... Maybe in a part where someone has a audience-heard monologue with himself and is on the way home...

So, nothing special inside it until now. But: Its not crap. And that makes is good enough to throw it on other people - which you have already and successfully done.

Modify it or leave it. I think it can only improve IF you did (that sentence was no criticism), so don't panic.

[Cree`]

Adding to what Jadison said, I have to say the stereo delayed effect on the right side piano was getting on my nerves. Either the delay timing needs to be changed or you could do away with the delay

[JoyBoy]

Cree`: I think your right about the delayed effect there, it needs to be fixed.

I think it can only improve IF you did

vr_jadison: I'm sure I will do my best to improve myself because I'm really starting out and I'm not satisfied yet with what I make until now so I felt that I need someone to judge my work every once and a while so I can see how much did I improve.

I think I'll pass this and leave it as it is for now and I'm sure that I'll do my very best in the next one.

thank you guys for your feedback I really appreciated.

[vr_jadison]

Exactly, dude. Your song is okay in all matters. If it has reached the state that you wanted it to have, no improvement is needed anyway.

By the way: I did not find the delayed effect disturbing. It was not a mentionable problem for me at all...