Icarus

[VDZ]

Um, my music probably isn't of the quality you'd expect on these kinds of forums, but I don't really know where else to go >.>
http://www.tindeck.com/audio/image/b/ykvq (http://www.tindeck.com/audio/my/ykvq/Icarus-4)
^that's a song I made in FruityLoops. I think it's pretty good, but my opinion is kinda biased, since I'm the guy who made it.
Can you tell me what I can do to improve this song?

[JH Sounds]

Hm. I'm not sure if it's wise to use an 808-style beat all the way through the track. Maybe try alternating with a more realistic drumkit sound? Also there's a clashing/off-tempo hihat somewhere around 2:45. I hope these comments help.