[Exothug]

http://soundcloud.com/exothug/exothu...nal-order-halo

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[Exothug]

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[Elder Kirby]

All of your instruments sound very midi-like and dry.
The choir notes awkwardly drop out before each other, keep in mind that a real chorus isn't perfectly in sync with itself, the notes should flow into one another.
Your wobble bass get very repetitive, and so does your track--you have little to no variation.
Besides the drops, you basically stuck with the source all throughout, when you should have a nice balance of original material and source material.
That square lead is really out of place.
Your entire mix also seems to be all up front or on the right, you have no background besides that chorus thing.
Lastly, it seems like you kept all of the instruments playing once they individually came in, which doesn't help the monotony of your mix.

The only thing I like about your mix is that you have a decently engaging drop, but unfortunately that energy doesn't stay around for long.

[Rozovian]

Aside from the drums, your instrumentation is vanilla, and aside from the drums, the mixing is pretty vanilla as well. I can imagine this with strong staccato cellos instead of these slow legato samples, so I can hear the idea behind this... but you need those stronger samples for it. There's probably soundfonts and other freebies out there that can do it, and you can always layer some other samples to get the same effect if you can't find the correct samples. The static wub rhythm doesn't quite lend itself to interesting dubstep today.

There's also some direct writing problems, like the lack of punctuation at 1:22 or the ill-timed transition from the choral part to the strings part at 0:28. Piano humanization and other touches wouldn't hurt either. Structurally, it works ok until around 2 minutes in, when you run out of ideas and just repeat what you had before. It's fine to revisit and recycle previous parts, but an almost verbatim repeat with just a piano layer added isn't quite enough to warrant the repeat imo. It doesn't really bring anything new to the mix at that point.

You've got a good start here, good drums, decent mixing, some good ideas in the writing, just gotta get those to shine and get rid of the stuff that doesn't work and you'll have a pretty good track.

Also, welcome to ocr. :D