[Snooper_1989]

Dark Words - MP3 Version
Dark Words - OGG Version

I've been working on this mix for the past half a year and it's gotten to the stage in which I need to incorporate lyrics from my lyricist - but unlucky for me drama erupted and I now no longer have a lyricist. So I thought i'd post it all for you all to hear, and if you think you'd be suitable to be a lyricist for it (it's more of a rap style, that's what the original lyricist wanted) give me a buzz on the forums or on IRC (under the nick of Snooper, in #vgdj).

Hope you all enjoy it.

[Snooper_1989]

I really would appreciate some feedback on this mix, as I don't want it to fall through. I've been working on it for about six months.

[Radiowar]

ok not bad...strings are kinda icky, too much going on there, and the sample quality is not very good which usually doesn't matter for rap beats but it stands out here which is saying something. when the bass enters it comes across as way too weak. it needs more punch to it. the drums don't help much either, but at least get the bass sounding stronger.

just a personal preference thing...after the break at 1:40 i was expecting the next entrance to be a lot stronger.

overall i guess just make it stronger, it has potential but right now it just lacks energy...and given the repetitive nature of hiphop beats it needs to have that energy.

[Snooper_1989]

Hmm, interesting. I always found the song to be too bassy and loud so I toned it down a bit - although it may be my speakers. I'll keep adjusting and fine tuning. Thanks for the feedback. =)

[ChloroPhil]

yea you gotta make them drums more prominent sir. (that's a nice snare) The strings are too loud, and yeah their quality's not very good either. but i do like the ideas though.

[RepressedChaos]

Originally Posted by 2P a.k.a Ch|oroPhi|

yea you gotta make them drums more prominent sir. (that's a nice snare) The strings are too loud, and yeah their quality's not very good either. but i do like the ideas though.

I agree 100% the strings sound pretty airy

[Scott Scheule]

Syncopations nearly knocked me out of my chair.

[Snooper_1989]

Originally Posted by Scott Scheule

Syncopations nearly knocked me out of my chair.

I'm not sure if you meant that as a good thing or a bad thing... Oo

[Scott Scheule]

I'm not sure either. Let's call it an entirely descriptive fact, with no normative content.

[Blackwinged Saron]

well, that's why it's called ocREMIX. I'm impressed but since you're out a lyricist I would suggest working the melody to be less repetative. this is, unless you are finding another lyricist. But I really am not even complaining about that. It sounds great as is.