[Hicky Eighth]

Originally Posted by FM

I love whenever anyone uses SFX creatively. Nice work! Fun, cleanly done.

Thanks! I'm happy to see someone commenting, this thread was already being alone.
Do you think this music will pass by the judges?

[FM]

I have very little experience with the judges and very little knowledge of the site standards. If it were me, I'd pass it, and I'd say it's better than the thing I got passed 7 years ago. But again I am no expert!

[Elder Kirby]

Very nice!

I only have two complaints:

Replace the synth at 0:50 and where ever it appears elsewhere. It sounds too off, and there are other ways you can make a synth sound airy.

Add some variation and fills to the drums! They are very stale at the moment.

Also, at 2:57 or so, when the bass came back, it all sounded very clashy and off.

[Hicky Eighth]

Originally Posted by Elder Kirby

Very nice!
I only have two complaints:
Replace the synth at 0:50 and where ever it appears elsewhere. It sounds too off, and there are other ways you can make a synth sound airy.
Add some variation and fills to the drums! They are very stale at the moment.
Also, at 2:57 or so, when the bass came back, it all sounded very clashy and off.

Thanks! I did not know where to move to improve the music, and I would send it to the judges, you came on time! I´ll try to do what you said.

[Elder Kirby]

Oh and one more thing:

Your mix stays very true to the source, which isn't bad, but you have very little original parts, if any. I suggest rewriting some sections and whatnot.

I like this mix a lot, it reminds me of the very relaxing music of Super Mario Sunshine
As such, I think an accordion counterpoint could work here, so try that.

I wanted to comment on your stereo separation, but I lost my headphones so I can't tell if it's done well or not. Alas.

[Hicky Eighth]

Originally Posted by Elder Kirby

Oh and one more thing:

Your mix stays very true to the source, which isn't bad, but you have very little original parts, if any. I suggest rewriting some sections and whatnot.
I like this mix a lot, it reminds me of the very relaxing music of Super Mario Sunshine
As such, I think an accordion counterpoint could work here, so try that.
I wanted to comment on your stereo separation, but I lost my headphones so I can't tell if it's done well or not. Alas.

Actualy i like to be true to the original composition.
I Work with tiny earphones not the pro earphones, because i think it provides a sound experience more complete. About the estereo I leave estable in sides not much shifting or switching.
I'm not sure about what you mean about the accordion, sorry. So, you want that me use the accordion or not?

[Pyro Paper Planes]

This is a very unconventional remix. The SFX bring a nice touch to the overall mix. The synthesizers sound... odd. I think they work for the track, but it does give an eery tone. A good example is the high-pitched pad/noise around 2:30.

The guitar and drums sound very MIDI like. I'm not there's much you can do about the guitar - It kind of fits in a way. I think my issue with the percussion is the lack of dynamic range and the snare drum. Unfortunately, percussion is my weakness, so I'm not too sure what to recommend.

I suppose my gripe with the track is that there are so many elements that shouldn't work, yet they do in a very off-putting way. And it kind of works.

[Hicky Eighth]

Originally Posted by Pyro Paper Planes

This is a very unconventional remix. The SFX bring a nice touch to the overall mix. The synthesizers sound... odd. I think they work for the track, but it does give an eery tone. A good example is the high-pitched pad/noise around 2:30.
The guitar and drums sound very MIDI like. I'm not there's much you can do about the guitar - It kind of fits in a way. I think my issue with the percussion is the lack of dynamic range and the snare drum. Unfortunately, percussion is my weakness, so I'm not too sure what to recommend.
I suppose my gripe with the track is that there are so many elements that shouldn't work, yet they do in a very off-putting way. And it kind of works.

You know how hard is to sequence guitar? to improve this only with a real acoustic guitar, and i don't know play.
Seems like you basically electronic music with synthesizers that do not simulate real instruments, because you were the one who liked synth at 2:30.
And I agree with the guy that should improve the drums, but in sequence, not in the samples. The music sound have quality, and can not be compared with MIDI at all.