[Magellanic]

Cheers for the feedback, always appreciated I've just given it a once over (things such as velocities) and yeah.......gonna put as Mod-Review:

Source: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=thtiUXckAVg

[Gario]

MOD REVIEW

Man, when this thing gets going it really gets going - love that guitar work in there, when it gets to it. Of course, it takes a considerable amount to get there, considering the length of the track overall. The arrangement, in this sense, is borderline passable. Source is there, though - maybe a little bit too much so, in fact, but you do have some real fun with it later in the track, so I think the interpretation end will pass.

Personally, I feel it's too short. It has a lot of energy, and really feels like it's going to push through to a new section that changes things up considerably, but then it just... ends. I have a feeling the extended intro is giving a sense of unbalance to the track, but rather than change the arrangement on the intro try giving it some more love at the end, perhaps giving it another section before letting it close off. Give it some thought.

Considering how much of the track consists of the piano/synth combo, it's important that you nail it... and I don't think you do, quite yet. The piano sounds plodding in a lot of the texture, in the beginning (it gets better with the runs), and the synths that you use sound weak. It just sounds too thin and relies too much on having a heavy attack for effect. Lighten up on the attack on that synth, make it thicker (Layering? EQ?) and envelope a swell when it would be most effective. Every time these instruments come to the foreground these issues arise, so it's important that you address them.

Production quality... well, I'm listening on hand-me-down earbuds from a school, right now, so I can't say much for sure. Sounds like it'll pass to me, in that regard, but it'd be nice if another mod confirmed this for me.

Nice work, and awesome source. Not nearly enough Tyrian love on here, so I'm glad to see you fighting the good fight. Be sure to get those instruments fixed, for sure, and take a look at the end of the track before submitting, though.

[ambient]

Generally agree with what Gario said - definite EQ issues on some instruments, but overall good rearrangement of the source. While I think that the intro feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the mix, it shouldn't be a deal breaker.

Overall production/mixing is adequate. It is not squeaky clean and could use some more TLC.

[Magellanic]

Thanks so much for the feedback guys, I didn't post earlier coz.....well I didn't have an update. I've been working on it trying to address the issues you posted. I suppose the biggest thing update is the new section at the end. Took a while, but managed to get a solo whacked in there. I'm still not quite sure of the mixing. Been experimenting loads but don't seem to be able to improve it beyond this latest update.

Remix:

Thank you again for the feedback as it really helped motivate me to stick at this and try to improve it Much love!

[evktalo]

Random thoughts:

- I like the piano sound
- Hmm, could use a little more humanization in the beginning: I'd vary the velocities so that some of the notes are accented and other are played more lightly, especially when there's a bit faster run. When the bass drums comes in, the mechanical feel on the piano is fine for me (though humanizing that too a bit might be a cool touch)
- The intro seemed to flow into the meat of the arrangement better than the previous version
- Very nice to hear this familiar theme
- Rock!
- Some flubs, playing of the lead sounds messy in.. can't seem to get a timestamp from the tindeck player? Just before the halfway mark.
- The volumes of rock and strings/piano seem uneven just after the halway mark, the strings seem to overpower everything. Maybe use compression on them?
- The new extension in the end works quite well, modifies the original but still follows it
- The piece didn't seem too short like the last version did
- Cymbal crescendo at the end clips a lot

The playing is pretty good and enjoyable both in performance and sound. I think it could affford to be a bit tighter at some points (can't give timestamps). You're doing a good job here, so it deserves to be top-notch and flub free. Tyrian FTW!

--Eino

[Magellanic]

I finally feel happy with this. Spent a long time getting the EQ and balacing sorted. I've cleaned up the "flub". The more soar my fingers are, the more flub there is lol. But thanks for the feedback Eino, I've addressed the points you mentioned as best I can.

Remix: http://soundcloud.com/lidawg/purple-v5-draft

Changes:

Re-recorded rhythm guitars and leads
EQ
Velocities
Balancing
Snare drum


That's all finished now but would still love some feedback. I'm sure I will have missed something

[evktalo]

The link's dead? Sorry I haven't been able to comment sooner.. I did take a listen a while back, and recall the lead still had timing problems.

--Eino

[Magellanic]

Hey bud, yeah. I've submitted it, but I'd still appreciate feedback if you have any

http://soundcloud.com/lidawg/data-flux

[timaeus222]

I have some small issues with this that unfortunately will have to wait:
The snare is a bit too soft. I've taken a look at some professional guitar tracks and what you should do is make sure the snare is at about -1dB, but your whole track should be at about -0.7dB maximum altogether. Then, hard limit it to -1dB and normalize it to -0.2dB... three times (seriously, it seems like Sixto does that too; his tracks are borderline overload but they're compressed so well that it sounds just fine). xD Give that a shot and see how it sounds, and if you like it, and it wasn't approved, then it might help on the resub. :D

[Dhsu]

Solid track, but the intro hurts it IMO. It's still pretty mechanical-sounding and the chords are off sometimes (e.g. 0:18, same mistake at 1:54). And I can see that you're trying to mix things up by bringing out the strings at 0:29 but that ends up exposing them too much and making them sound fake.

My suggestion would be, instead of focusing on piano and strings in the intro, use those guitar skills of yours and do some acoustic guitar! I think that would add a lot to the intimate feeling you're going for.