[Dual Cross]

Herro , Something i was playing with this morning. Tell me what you think. This is about 10% complete. Criticism is good ay.

Im trying to capture the vertigo cloud experiences during this section of the game. Especially when he is in the crater left by the temple confronting sephiroth and how he cant control himself. This does not have an ending yet.

Any Comments Appreciated~

[dj_ultima]

The piece as a whole could definitely use some variety, but this is fair a base. The bending/falls on the ends of notes in the melody are really repetitive and I'm not sure if they achieve the feeling that you're going for. You said you wanted vertigo, right? This remix might (around the one minute mark) might offer some inspiration. It has the trippy, not-quite-in-your-right-mind feeling to it that I think you might be trying to get across.

http://ocremix.org/remix/OCR00971/

Aside from that, you said that this was only ten percent complete, so I won't dive too deeply into nitpicking, but as a overarching suggestion, don't be afraid to deviate from the melody more. You have a good start so far, though, and I hope that helped a little.


- Jen