[YannickJason]

Originally Posted by timaeus222

Well, if you want it to sound modern, it shouldn't have that square-saw wave at 0:23. That's an 80s type synth, usually. Same with the monophonic saw wave at 2:35.

In general, the piano is getting drowned out of the DnB drums. Although the drums should be heard, they shouldn't overpower everything else. Try raising the velocity response to about 64 if you can.

The square wave hybrid bass is also slightly classic. Maybe something with FM synthesis? Or you could just go for the classic feel. It doesn't necessarily have to be modern. Maybe you don't have the ideas ready for a "modern" mix.

He wanted me to try for something modern, as he is making a modern stage. The FM is good advice though. I've just gotta get my hands on some good FM sounds now.

Thank you for the critique.

[Spi.der.men]

Originally Posted by YannickJason

Update number 7!

https://www.box.com/s/403bb4c3f4bf72539638

Progress is coming along even more. I'm hoping to finalize this soon.

I think it's time to crack out the acoustic guitar...

I think you nailed it right here. But I agree it sounds a little more classic. It feels a little more dance-y than rock.

[YannickJason]

Originally Posted by Spi.der.men

I think you nailed it right here. But I agree it sounds a little more classic. It feels a little more dance-y than rock.

I want it to feel like the original, and still have that "Modern Sonic" feel. :/

[NegimaSonic]

Sorry, not here to add anything especially useful, I'm just always happy to see another decent remix of Aquarium Park :D

[YannickJason]

Originally Posted by NegimaSonic

Sorry, not here to add anything especially useful, I'm just always happy to see another decent remix of Aquarium Park :D

Why thank you! It's always nice to hear that people like my work.

I'll try to make this even better.

[Defiant00]

Wasn't sure about some of the earlier versions, but this latest one is quite good. Got a couple small suggestions though:

1) With the piano to the right I found myself wanting something to the left to balance it out a bit (please note that I know my hearing leans toward the right somewhat, so it's quite possible that I'm the only one who thinks this )

2) For your wobble bass I think it would be better if it didn't show up and disappear so abruptly. For example, the first time it shows up at 1:05 it might be better if it faded in right before you actually started using it at 1:05. And then from 1:08-1:15 I keep expecting it to show back up but it doesn't again until 1:15. And at 1:30 and 1:36 it feels a bit slow/off compared to the rest of your wobble writing.

Basically, I think the wobble's a neat idea but it feels a bit disjoint from the rest of the song to me right now.

[YannickJason]

Originally Posted by Defiant00

Wasn't sure about some of the earlier versions, but this latest one is quite good. Got a couple small suggestions though:

1) With the piano to the right I found myself wanting something to the left to balance it out a bit (please note that I know my hearing leans toward the right somewhat, so it's quite possible that I'm the only one who thinks this )

2) For your wobble bass I think it would be better if it didn't show up and disappear so abruptly. For example, the first time it shows up at 1:05 it might be better if it faded in right before you actually started using it at 1:05. And then from 1:08-1:15 I keep expecting it to show back up but it doesn't again until 1:15. And at 1:30 and 1:36 it feels a bit slow/off compared to the rest of your wobble writing.

Basically, I think the wobble's a neat idea but it feels a bit disjoint from the rest of the song to me right now.

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, my piano vst pans depending on where it is in the scale. I need to work more on the EQ of the wobble bass. It does get kind of quiet too. I'll try the fade in. :P

[Garpocalypse]

I've missed the last few versions but it sounds like it's coming along pretty well. It sounds like you were trying out some counterpoint under the melody. You could easily squeeze even more out of the remix if you play around with it.

Keep it going!

[YannickJason]

Here's a smaller, not too significant update. I changed around a few things and lengthened the "wubs" some.

http://www.box.com/s/cdf0b53c4c14fc138215

[YannickJason]

So, I'm getting stuck on this piano part because I'm not hearing the chords properly. I really want this to sound good, but I'm just not getting it.

Would anyone like to help out a guy using FL Studio?