[G-Mixer]

NEW UPDATED VERSION HERE:
https://soundcloud.com/gwilliamson/t...ets-groovy-v-4

Hey guys. Did this remix and wanted to know if you guys thought it was any good. I want to submit it to the site and hope it gets evaluated, but I want to see what you guys think about it before trying to submit it. It is sort of influenced by "Chamber of the Goddess" remix by Disasterpiece, found in the 25YearLegend ocremix Legend of Zelda album, though I gave it a harder and more funky feel to it, and less acid jazz. I guess to put it simple, it's a lot harder, especially on the drums. Although it is inspired by that remix, I believe personally that it is heavily different. So yeah, what do you guys think? Link to remix: http://soundcloud.com/gwilliamson/go...-fairies-remix

[Rozovian]

Eggshaker and syncopation all over the place. :D

I was expecting a bass or a thicker lead or something at 0:44 when the snare comes in. Nope. Instead, it keeps sounding empty. Disasterpiece had a big warm pad in there, and longer release on his bells/vibes/whatever.

First half sounds too empty. It seems to work as an intro, but not for half the track. I feel like I could skip from 0:44 to 2:32, which is more than half the track. There's parts in there, like the pizzicato building that might fit elsewhere in a new arrangement...

So yeah, the arrangement doesn't work. There's some really cool ideas in here, you just need to either place them in a different order and add stuff, or simply add stuff to the arrangement you've got.

[G-Mixer]

Ok thanks for the feedback.

[G-Mixer]

http://soundcloud.com/gwilliamson/th...ss-gets-groovy

Hopefully that's better.

[Rozovian]

It is. Now it's actually funky. :D

For additional funk, you can do more with syncopation. You can have not just the drums, but also the chord ostinato stagger in the same way, skipping the last note and beginning on the syncopated beat, pausing until the second note... basically following the drums. Any and all instruments _can_ do this.

Cool stuff. :D

[G-Mixer]

Well thank you for your advice.

[jnWake]

I don't know if it's just me, but the drums are ridiculously loud, especially the kick. The synth bass (or whatever it is, begins at 0:50) sounds a bit weird IMO, maybe drop it one octave.

The part with the strings sounds pretty, even though the whistle sounding sample is a bit quiet. Pizzicato is an interesting choice, but the drums and bass become repetitive by now.

The harmonies in the next section are interesting and give the arrangement a new feeling, but then the drums, bass and guitar kick in doing the exact same thing they've done during all the song...

Overall, the song does what you intended it to do, it is funky! However, at least to me, it feels repetitive and has some balancing issues.

[G-Mixer]

So I tried submitting this but they no likey, but they said I was off to a good start and Ben Briggs told me to continue working on it because apparently he and his followers on SoundCloud really enjoyed it. ^_^

LINK: https://soundcloud.com/gwilliamson/t...ets-groovy-v-2

So I went back and did some stuff to it.

-The awkward fake acoustic guitar on the low-end was replaced with electric piano
-The mix has been updated and is better now
-More variation in the song
--Added in soft piano in places
--Changed beat and bass near the end
--Added in another vibe solo near the end
-"Un-perfected" for realism

Yup. So tell me what you think about it. I'd love feedback because I may try re-submitting this to the judges and hope that it may make it to the judges panel and they will hopefully accept it.

So yeah. Feedbackz meh.

[Chimpazilla]

I like this, what a creative idea. There are some really unique inspired ideas here. There will absolutely need to be more drum variation, the same kick/snare/shaker combo gets old. At a minimum, it needs some soft crashes at the transition points! I think there may be crashes in here, but wow are they quiet. Change up the shaker pattern at least by 1:33, better yet, make it a different instrument altogether, and some different patterns, to accent the different moods of each section.

I'm not sold on that bass. I know it is meant to be funky, but it just sounds a bit flabby and out of place to me... personal opinion. Also, bass writing could be varied here and there, it's very static.

My main gripe about the song is the leads. When they play, they are buried. At 1:33, there is a piano playing. I don't think it is meant to lead there, but what if it did? Push the fairy melody back a bit, bring that piano forward and do something more original with it. Right now it is just a jumble of countermelodies with no focus. Go through the song slowly and carefully, considering what is the main focus at each point that the listener should be paying attention to, then bring that out.

That break at 1:57 is my favorite part! The staccato strings and new chords are gorgeous. But there is that *same* shaker, yawn! Even changing that to a soft hi hat would give variation. Or what about just a few triangle hits? Just something different. And at 2:09, there is an opportunity to introduce some new kind of lead over the established instrumentation, something soulful and louder than the background!

Again at 2:22, just background and no lead. You could do a mini-lead melody here, getting us ready for the lead solo that follows at 2:33. I like the snare break that leads up to 2:33 a lot, the song needs more of this kind of thing!

Harp could use just a drop more reverb. Just a drop!

I hope you keep going, I really like the ideas you've got here!

[Argle]

Despite the name of the track, I'm not really feeling the drums and bass.