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Old 12-12-2006, 01:08 AM
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F-Zero Mute City: Mute Velocity! * NEAR FINAL WIP *

(Copy and paste)http://www.freewebs.com/sbcrap/cityo...rieversion.mp3

This is an F -Zero ReMix of Mute City, entitled "City of Speed". It be my first.

It's completely finished, and I submitted it a few hours ago, so yah, enjoy.

The remix is meant to be a verry funky, synthetic mix.
My personal favorite is the ending.
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Old 12-12-2006, 01:44 AM
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hmm....ok

wow

don't get your hopes with this mix getting on OCR.
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Old 12-12-2006, 01:51 AM
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hmm....ok

wow

don't get your hopes with this mix getting on OCR.
Well, what don't you like about it? It is my first ReMix after all, so I didn't expect it to be perfect. I'd like som constructive critiscism on what I can perfect and what I can make better.
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Old 12-12-2006, 02:13 AM
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I don't have any detailed criticism at the moment. But I will say, it's not bad, just a bit plain. Keep trying.
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Old 12-12-2006, 02:25 AM
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The reason why I don't have any criticism is because there isn't anything really...good to go off of.

The bass synth is terrible...it's too grinding and annoying and messy, especially with the other...instruments? The first synth is WAY too obtrusive and loud...it just grinds on the ears.

I know there is percussion somewhere...I can feel it, but I can't hear it. That could be a good thing...but the way this mix works it's probably due to a bad drum kit and all the other instruments being too loud. There are a couple sections that have a softer synth...and thats not too bad, but everything else stays the same, taking away from the effect.

Keeping the same instruments with different sections repeating kind of makes it get really repetative after a while...

I think that's all I remember of it.
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Old 12-12-2006, 02:33 AM
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Pretty much what Chavous said.

It also has no genre, no direction, no climax, no originality, no style.

It is indeed a really really n00b attempt at a mix, but no one is perfect at the beginning. Simply practice more, try new things, learn new things, do new things. Learn more about the sequencer and mastering and production.

And listen to how other songs on this site are re-arranged. Yours really sounds like a midi-rip. (or close to)
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Old 12-12-2006, 02:35 AM
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Yeah, try a different synth instead of the Slayer. You'll get better as you practice more at mixing.
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Old 12-12-2006, 04:55 AM
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Tone down some of the midi sounds, and at 2:39 after that long of a intro its going to have to be intense and sound really good. Try to find something that can make the song unique as well, dont want to be to generic.
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Old 12-12-2006, 10:03 PM
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New WIP

I've corrected the MIDI soundiness of the last one, better guitars, a better backbeat, and more of a consistency throughout. I was an idiot to think the mix was done. Here's the new WIP of it, retitled "Mute Velocity", and it's worlds better IMO.


I've softened up the insanely bad sounds, the "warpy" pad intro is different(in a good way)and I've changed some other things around.

NOTE: the ending is just me fooling around, that is not seriously part of the mix :p

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Enjoy.
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Alright...you say you've fixed it up..let's take a look see.

Oh....I like the intro better. It's really pretty cool.

Just a known fact: you aren't going to get a good guitar sound out of anything...I recommend going for a different sound. Perhaps some kind of synth. Just not simulated electric guitar, unless you spend hours upon hours tweaking it to sound real...trust me, you're better off going for a different sound this early in your remixing career.

Also, whatever you are using for bass isn't really powerful...it's very hollow sounding. It doesn't fill in the space when it's alone. I suggest leaving that sound in there, but layering a bass below it.

Ok... the guitar getting louder at 1:32...yea, didn't work.

Alright...the drums need something a little more than just a kick. And the kick needs to be more powerful too. Try adding a hi-hat and a snare drum or a clap, just to move everything along and to fill out the sound field.

From 1:51 on this just gets real repetative...add some parts, make it more interesting.

Also, this song can use some extra background parts, it'll help back up the melody and fill out the sound.

And again, try to toss up the melody a bit, make it more interesting.

This is actually a big improvement...but you still have a ways to go.
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