Thanks for the in-depth feedback! I really appreciate it.
I'll definitely take it on board and revisit the track to see how much it can be improved.
Very pleased to hear the voice doesn't detract from it too much, I thought it might be quite polarising.
I've made notes to experiment with:-
-Adding a new section or two to make it feel like a more complete piece
-Giving the lead percussion a bit more presence
-Making the bass more pronounced
Hopefully I should have a new version to share soon.