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Icebird

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  1. Neat idea! I liked what you did from thinking through the process of falling asleep, dreaming, waking to the alarm clock at the end. Some suggestions:

    1. The panning you did in the middle was a little extreme--it sounded like the instruments were losing volume when they reached the furthest separation. Try reducing the maximum separation or slightly increasing the volume during max separation to compensate.

    2. I didn't get tired of the intro, but after the hard, nightmare-ish instrument began at 40% (sorry no timer available) that went on a little too long without much variation.

    3. I thought the percussion was OK, but I don't think full-on drums would be out of place once you get going.

    4. BASS. You need a bass line.

    Looking forward to seeing the final product!

  2. How can I make 1:43 sound less arbitrary in its transition?? Do I need to do drastic changes or??

    Try taking a phrase or two of the single note & percussion that you hear at the key change at 1:43, and add it on the end of the first section just before that transition.. that'll give your drum fill a chance to finish out before you transition and hopefully prepare the listener for it as well.

  3. I really like what you've done with this. All the "in-between" sections are great like at 3:00. Outside of those, I feel like the melody is repeated too many times without any variation.. take a few liberties!

    When you get into the underworld theme, it sounds terrific but then gets a little predictable again. Try some screaming guitar ad lib after the build-ups at 6:05 or 6:25. Hope this helps you out!

  4. I would definitely like to hear how you progress on this one. I agree with everything J-Pfleg said with one exception. There's a repeating point in your melody that doesn't seem to fit together well with the note being played in the bass part

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    and maybe a couple other spots. It doesn't make me wince or anything, just bothers me enough to be a distraction.

    I agree that the middle section with the clean guitar needs some extra spice. As it is, it goes a little long without much variation.

    Overall, I'm liking it and looking forward to seeing what you do with it! Good job!

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