Mak Eightman Posted February 6, 2011 Share Posted February 6, 2011 Hello! Another experiment in sound. Any critics, advice, thoughts are welcome!! http://official.fm/tracks/206378 I want this track with vocals in future, but I not even started to think about lyrics. So any suggestions will be GREAT!! Thank You! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dissidia Posted February 6, 2011 Share Posted February 6, 2011 This is hot, it works without vocals. But it'd be interesting to hear with as well. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diseased Project Posted February 7, 2011 Share Posted February 7, 2011 Without commenting the sound quality since my current headphones might be deceiving, I say this definitely needs those vocals and it's apparent you've written some parts with the idea of vocals there in mind (like 0:33 onwards). Plus, the bass track sounds a bit silly without the vocals. The rhythms are pretty nice. Melodies remind me a bit of the band "Pain" (maybe you've heard of it). Similar vocal style would work best here as well I believe. I got the feeling that the song might be a bit too repetitive (at least for my tastes), because the opening melody and all of its variants are heard so many times in the song (though I'll admit I skipped a lot after the first minute to see if this was true). I would toss some of the parts where the melody is played, and maybe try to create a whole new, distinct chorus part to fill the space. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dissidia Posted February 7, 2011 Share Posted February 7, 2011 I did listen to it while doing something else so that may have effected how I conceived it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mak Eightman Posted February 7, 2011 Author Share Posted February 7, 2011 Without commenting the sound quality since my current headphones might be deceiving, I say this definitely needs those vocals and it's apparent you've written some parts with the idea of vocals there in mind (like 0:33 onwards). Plus, the bass track sounds a bit silly without the vocals. The rhythms are pretty nice. Melodies remind me a bit of the band "Pain" (maybe you've heard of it). Similar vocal style would work best here as well I believe. I got the feeling that the song might be a bit too repetitive (at least for my tastes), because the opening melody and all of its variants are heard so many times in the song (though I'll admit I skipped a lot after the first minute to see if this was true). I would toss some of the parts where the melody is played, and maybe try to create a whole new, distinct chorus part to fill the space. Pain one of my favorite bands) As for repetitive.. You right! It is. But it doesn't bother me at all. This song(i hope it will be a song), going to be in album(11-13 tracks). So I think theres no need to make it super-awesome, changing melody or sections or whatever. Some quality upgrade + good vocals and this track will be good, I think.. But maybe I'm gonna cut intro and rerecord bass guitar in closer future. Thank you for giving this shit your time guys! P.S. Read my sig, just in case. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragnBreth Posted February 7, 2011 Share Posted February 7, 2011 Very cool. I'm kinda reminded of early Paradise Lost (although, this is substantially more upbeat, lol). I'm interested to see what you come up with for lyrics and vocals. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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