XPRTNovice Posted May 16, 2012 Share Posted May 16, 2012 Hey Guys, I only have a few days to get this ready for the competition, so I need some help. There are some obvious problems (a couple of timing issues, the guitar at 2:12) but I'm looking for an overall critique of this. Does it sound empty or repetitive, can I add pads to make it fill out more, are there any other suggestions... I wanted to take this into Django territory, for those of you who are jazz fans. I dunno if it worked or what. Guitar and clarinet are live, all else are soundfonts or samples. Thanks! http://soundcloud.com/xprtnovice/gobble-snarf-snap Source: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
imazi643 Posted May 17, 2012 Share Posted May 17, 2012 I think you should add some reverb on the drums in the empty sections (esp. 2:14) especially to match the clarinet's reverb. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jnWake Posted May 17, 2012 Share Posted May 17, 2012 I really liked this. Style was unexpected for this track and fits incredibly well. Anyway, I like the mixing except two things: the sound of the train (even the one from the game sounds better imo) and the beggining is quite muddy. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gario Posted May 18, 2012 Share Posted May 18, 2012 I dunno - on my listening of it I really enjoyed how he transitioned the 'Train' sound into the rhythmic hats. It was actually really cleverly done. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cash Posted May 18, 2012 Share Posted May 18, 2012 I love the style! I think it's great as is, really unique. It sounds a bit repetitive, but honestly I don't think that hurts the song, especially given the style. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 19, 2012 Author Share Posted May 19, 2012 Thanks guys! I've done a bit of flourishing here and there and changed some things to lessen the repetition and improve the leveling. Give it a listen if you'd like! The link below has been updated. http://soundcloud.com/xprtnovice/gobble-snarf-snap Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jnWake Posted May 19, 2012 Share Posted May 19, 2012 I still love how it sounds. The vocal samples are pretty cool (in the beggining). Maybe adding a ragtime-ish piano to some sections would be a good idea (?), even if it already sounds badass. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 19, 2012 Author Share Posted May 19, 2012 I actually was planning on adding some honky tonk but couldn't find the right soundfont. I grabbed one this morning and put it in there. I'm subbing this for mod review because the deadline is close. Thanks for the feedback everyone, you really helped me tweak this. Do your worst, Mods! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Calum Posted May 19, 2012 Share Posted May 19, 2012 this is great! I've got stiff competition ; -) Keep up the good work, it all sounds great to me! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flexstyle Posted May 19, 2012 Share Posted May 19, 2012 Bit hard to mod review this if you don't have a source tune around, too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 19, 2012 Author Share Posted May 19, 2012 Ah crap! is the sourceSorry! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flexstyle Posted May 19, 2012 Share Posted May 19, 2012 <MODREVIEW> Honestly, I really dig this. I'm a huge fan of this style of music, especially when paired with house (a la the new Electro-Swing stuff, Caravan Palace and the like). Just a couple of minor criticisms: - The finger sweeping noise (when you're changing chords) gets just a bit distracting at times. - Some of the longer notes with the clarinet (I assume) need a bit more articulation, if they're going to be held that long. They get just a wee bit stale after more than a half-note or so, I'd say. - A couple of the transitions, such as around 1:44 and 2:32 lack some energy. The beat stays very much the same throughout the entire track, and while that's not a bad thing per se, you could stand to add a few percussion fills and maybe a bit more excitement as the track progresses--just give the listener something to build upon. The mix sounds pretty decent to me, assuming you want the percussion to be so low in the mix. As an aesthetic choice, I think it works decently well. The train wind noise from the source tune is just a wee bit harsh, perhaps, but that's my only real nitpick. It's pretty good, really. I enjoyed myself thoroughly while listening, and I bet a bunch of other listeners will as well--the arrangement is pretty clever, and definitely has that "foot-tapping" quality to it. A bit more polish would really send you in the right direction, I think. </MODREVIEW> Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 19, 2012 Author Share Posted May 19, 2012 Thanks Flex! You nailed some things I've been trying to work on. Hopefully I can get them done before Monday night... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flexstyle Posted May 19, 2012 Share Posted May 19, 2012 If you want to have me help you take this in a Caravan Palace-esque direction, with very defined electronic elements, lemme know. I'd love to throw a house spin on this mix at some point if you're down! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 19, 2012 Author Share Posted May 19, 2012 Truth in advertising - I studied Caravan Palace and Django tunes for a week straight to prep my brain for arranging this piece. I have to submit this to the competition in two days, but assuming it doesn't win and get picked up for the CD I'd love to collab. Or, conversely, if you need a clarinet player to lay something down, you know who to call. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 19, 2012 Author Share Posted May 19, 2012 Flex, I hit you with a PM. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emunator Posted May 21, 2012 Share Posted May 21, 2012 I sense great things brewing in this thread Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Draconiator Posted May 21, 2012 Share Posted May 21, 2012 I found a ReMix with a similar style to this one ( http://ocremix.org/remix/OCR01466/ ). Oh Hey Flex, PM me please. You've done wonders with another track of mine, and I wanted to see if you'd be down with helping me on another track of mine. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted May 22, 2012 Author Share Posted May 22, 2012 I found a ReMix with a similar style to this one ( http://ocremix.org/remix/OCR01466/ ). Oh Hey Flex, PM me please. You've done wonders with another track of mine, and I wanted to see if you'd be down with helping me on another track of mine. Dude! I've been looking for that mix forever! I found it on a website a while ago and didn't know it was up here. I love it. I wanted to collab with that guy but he never got back to me. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Electric-Chai Posted August 23, 2012 Share Posted August 23, 2012 I fell IN LOVE with this mix the first time I heard it! This is just the kind of snazzy take that FF VI needs. I always enjoyed Olarin's take http://ocremix.org/remix/OCR01752/ but yours breathed new excitement in this classic mix. Kinda like a Dias de Los Muertos take on death without the spanish. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Dan Posted August 23, 2012 Share Posted August 23, 2012 I was curious to hear that, but the soundcloud isn't playing the song. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XPRTNovice Posted August 24, 2012 Author Share Posted August 24, 2012 try this link: http://soundcloud.com/xprtnovice/gobble-snarf-snap Thanks for the praise! I'm excited about this track and another one that is going to be on Balance and Ruin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Dan Posted August 24, 2012 Share Posted August 24, 2012 try this link: http://soundcloud.com/xprtnovice/gobble-snarf-snap Thanks for the praise! I'm excited about this track and another one that is going to be on Balance and Ruin. Not working for me yet. And this is happening only in this song. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Modus Posted August 24, 2012 Share Posted August 24, 2012 Works fine for me. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Dan Posted August 24, 2012 Share Posted August 24, 2012 mysteries... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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