~Faseeh~ Posted August 15, 2013 Share Posted August 15, 2013 (edited) Hey OverClocked Remix! I'm ~Faseeh~/GottaGoFas, a very new musician and I do remixes and originals and the likes. I like to think I'm at a good skill level for how long I've been in this (a year)and I'd like to get some proffesional feedback and I thought OCR would be a good place to ask. https://soundcloud.com/gottagofas/stardust-speedway-jp This is a chill house remix of Stardust Speedway Good Future JP with touches of the present version. I'd like to know what you guys think about that. https://soundcloud.com/gottagofas/egg-golem-modern This is something I tried with the Sonic Generations Modern style and interactive music scoring in my mind. Again, I'd like to get feedback! Thanks for listening and critiqing, in advance. Edited November 24, 2013 by ~Faseeh~ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spellmynamewithabang Posted August 15, 2013 Share Posted August 15, 2013 really digging the stardust speedway one! the bass sample is a little grating, and the string bit that starts around 1:14 really bugs me (it sounds fake and the pattern is too repetitive) around 1:49 there's some weird dissonance that sounds really out-of-key i'd like to see some more variation but for the most part it's really nice; i'd like it to be extended! i'm not nearly as much a fan of the egg golem theme but it fares pretty well overall. that said, though, that fake guitar is distracting it's not -that- bad apart from the lead (which is really off-putting) there's a horn blast around 1:40ish panned left in it that's really loud 1:55 there's a drop in amplitude and everything's panned center and it's weird idk if that helps Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Faseeh~ Posted August 16, 2013 Author Share Posted August 16, 2013 really digging the stardust speedway one! the bass sample is a little grating, and the string bit that starts around 1:14 really bugs me (it sounds fake and the pattern is too repetitive) around 1:49 there's some weird dissonance that sounds really out-of-key i'd like to see some more variation but for the most part it's really nice; i'd like it to be extended! i'm not nearly as much a fan of the egg golem theme but it fares pretty well overall. that said, though, that fake guitar is distracting it's not -that- bad apart from the lead (which is really off-putting) there's a horn blast around 1:40ish panned left in it that's really loud 1:55 there's a drop in amplitude and everything's panned center and it's weird idk if that helps Thanks man! I’m surprised I got nice feedback! Hm, what kind of bass would you like me to layer it with or something? What would work in your opinion? Ah, I see. Yeah, I just kinda caught that. Will change it up. I can try to add more variation! Onto Egg Golem. Hm, I see. I can get a live guitar on it, would that help? 1:40, I’ll check it out. Alright, will pan it out a bit more so it’s not an awkward change. I was told to try and send Stardust Speedway to OCRemix as an entry after getting back feedback, improving it and yeah... Should I try? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Faseeh~ Posted August 16, 2013 Author Share Posted August 16, 2013 Hey again. https://app.box.com/s/xgc4i6z58qvnpfcb9lx4 Improved it a lot. I really WOULD love to submit this to OCRemix so I'd like to get as much feedback as I can. I hope I do get some! Thanks! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rozovian Posted October 2, 2013 Share Posted October 2, 2013 Is this ready to be submitted? Don't mark it for mod review unless you think it is. Provide a link to source when you do. Nice groove. The mixing is all over the place, which is probably the biggest problem I can hear. Sort out your levels and you should have a good mix. The arrangement is quite repetitive, even for something that's built on a groove like this. You could look up posted remixes that are also built on a groove and figure out how they kept things interesting. I have a feeling this is rather conservative, but no source link, no source comment. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Faseeh~ Posted November 24, 2013 Author Share Posted November 24, 2013 Oh, it's been so long. Thanks for the feedback, but I guess I've improved a lot, will keep in mind and try to keep improving! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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