Terminal Vertex

it's very repetitve. it sounds like your section is repeated 4 times to make up the bulk of the middle of your song and then repeated again after the final vox. I think it follows the original too closely (exactly) in structure, arrangement and meter. it feels like exactly the same arrangement but with some different instrumentation and not mixed well. things like the counter melody at 0:55 are buried. i didn't mind the vox although in the final use it sounds a bit muffled in the mid-lows, your 'we're off demo' has a much cleaner sounding vox recording. perhaps adding some small snippets of additional dialog can be used to break up the x4 repetition of the middle of the song. the bass could be made stronger and i think overall the instrumentation needs polishing, especially the trumpety sounding synth and a better use of the musical space with less blending as the parts are not meant to be blended. it's good to provide a link to the source so people can evaluate the song in context against the original

ok, added an ending. gonna let my ear settle a bit from it and come back and see how it sounds. currently feels like the ending is dragging it's heel's a little bit.

woo, getting closer to final version, next section added, general minor changes here and there... i think i'll get rid of the choir ah's in one spot (at 1:36) cos they sound a bit cheesy. other than that.. i think i just need to stick an ending on it and done, perhaps from where it is build up to the chorus and then go outro. 2:12 is the normal way the song goes (according to the score). once i have the ending done i'll try and speak to one of the judges, thanks for the advice and encouragement, it's greatly appreciated!

thanks for the feedback it's very much appreciated! i'll work on the repetitiveness. i've added the original now as well.

hey, just a chilled voyage another world mix, A section quite happy with probably won't change.. B section is not how i want it yet, it could easily change... about 40% done atm i guess? http://www.users.on.net/~terminal/scenic_voyage_remix.mp3 all comments appreciated. there are parts of this i absolutely love and can't stop listening to it update: bells pushed down in the mix, B section expanded, horns dropped, much happier that now. i can't find the dissonance at 1:26 yet. link to the original: Chrono Cross - Voyage Another World http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o22BJ40om0A cheers.