http://picosong.com/cwmX/
New WIP. I decided to take the bits I liked from the first WIP and build the song up again, while taking into consideration the points raised.
The drums, rises etc. are pretty much placeholder at the moment, I haven't put much thought into them yet. I'm also concerned that the mixing might make it difficult to listen to - this is literally just a basic output from FL at the moment. I'm not sure I really have my head around this whole EQ thing yet so any tips would be appreciated.
I will post up another WIP when I have made more progress, but any feedback would be great in the mean time!