Great, thanks for the AWESOME feedback. Basically everything that you said, is exactly what I thought was wrong with it so far, but I couldn't figure out what. I'm going to try and get that fleshed out a lot more, ESPECIALLY at 1:02 and 2:05. I really noticed that, I love how it sounds, but that piano just isn't carrying it properly, just like you said.
You didn't think the overall composition was too quiet, did you?