Hi, everyone. I'm new here.
Loved the Pokemon games, I remember this song from Game Boy years.
Okay, so I listened to the source to this song, (the original), and also you're own about 4 or 5 times. Before I found the source song I was thinking to myself, "this song needs a bridge or something, something in between to make it not only longer but have a break so I don't feel the repetition." A part that's less melody, and more beat or atmosphere... something.
Then I listened to the original, and okay, so there's a part right after the melody you're featuring in your song... about 16 seconds into it, that holds out a bit and adds a supense level or something. If you just arranged that a little... gave it this "Daft" feel I bet it could be really awesome. You know, pick other instruments, slightly quieter then what you have now (or like PrototypeRaptor said, stick in a vocoder/robot voice or something) -This is just my opinion.
I don't know, but keep playing around with it. I was impressed when I heard it the first time. I was doing this funny "head back-and-forth" dance.
It's a rocking song! Please keep going with it! I'd like to see the progress.