Thank you for your well-considered answer, TheGuitahHeroe.
Okay, so you think I should not make it sound too much like the original.
Okay, that's really something helpful. I didn't really notice it earlier but now that you mention it - indeed.
I'm fine with that, I appreciate that you seem to like it. However, I wasn't going to submit it on OCR, I'm aware of the fact that it wouldn't be up to the standards.