I think what was wrong about it is that it feels like a teaser to me... I think it should've been extended... I see potential for at least 3 minutes there, and that's cutting it short. The final part alone should run for at least a minute, it's too small as it is, it keeps me hoping next time I hear it I automagically get the rest of the music
Other than that I found it very enjoyable and it reminded me of my favorite char in Saga Frontier. Nice work.
Now go get the rest of the music done.