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  1. There's a difference between a leitmotif and using different arrangements of the same tune. I think Super Mario World, for instance, is on the side of the latter. Sonic 3D Blast is a good example of the former; that was my first thought.

    Radiant Silvergun uses a couple of motives repeatedly and with a lot of focus on them in most of the pieces (from Sil's mention of FF Tactics, maybe it's a Hitoshi Sakimoto favorite). Ace Combat 4 reuses a single motive a few times, too. I think it's a relatively common practice in game music.

  2. I understand where you're coming from, Linearity, so how about this - from now on, we will stop rewording phrases, but we will always be on the lookout for spelling errors and missing periods. Commas will be less of a concern. Actual fact errors, if any, must be fixed though, don't you think...we can at least let Darklink42 post his suggestions. He is well informed that considering them is at our discretion.

    That sounds like a good compromise. Spelling and periods don't really call for much debate as grammar might. And I feel comfortable deferring to you guys on correcting factual errors. Let's agree to leave the wording and grammar as it stands and I will be at ease.

  3. Darklink42, I was begrudging your suggestions at first because this project is elderly and wants to pass away, and your editing can only prolong its life. But these you just posted are good catches, and I thank you for them. My responses are below. Polo should speak only for Polo when equating our collective modus operandi with nitpicking; I don't particularly like nitpicking. And I still want to publish this and be done as soon as DJP and Larry are ready to finalize.

    The reason is this: whenever somebody goes back for more editing, I feel a need to be involved, because what is being edited is two and a half years of work in which I have invested a considerable amount of time and effort. I can't just sit back and let the others take care of it, as it seems watkinzez has done, because I want a say in how all of my work turns out.

    Polo, you seem to have a lot more free time than I have to devote to this project, and as such you are better equipped to develop the project as you see fit. I simply can't keep up with you; I can't discuss everything with you and debate what changes to make. If we continue to fine-tune the project after this weekend, my schedule demands that I walk away and submit to whatever you and Dafydd and newcomers come up with.

    Therefore, I ask you, Dafydd and Polo, that we decide to be done with the project's content. It is marvelous as it stands now. If it were only half-complete, or still in rough draft form, my request would be ludicrous. But it is not half-complete or rough; it is grand. I haven't any more time to give to it, and I ask that you not put in more time without me.

    031Lara Croft- "and the many modes of transportation including jeep, motorbike, and kayak." ("and varied modes of transportation including jeeps, motorbikes, and kayaking")

    It's nitpicky but good. Changed.

    038Azel- "For her many complexities, her inner conflicts, and her personality that is unique for a female RPG character, Azel remains to this day a much-loved fan favourite." (...and a personality unique to female RPG characters) ("favorite" is also spelled wrong)

    This is fine as it is. Favourite is the British spelling.

    041Kyo Kusanagi-"Kyo Kusanagi is the poster child of the plus-populated roster in the King of Fighters series." (What does plus-populated mean?)

    Good point. Changed to "heavily-populated"

    046Lucca-"her inventions also a catalyst for the events leading to the quest that is undertaken in Chrono Trigger. " [(her inventions also serve as) or more simply (her inventions are a...)

    Probably a typo. Changed.

    -"unbeknownst to their home time" ("unknown in their home time") (unbeknowst implies that the home time itself is unaware, not of the monsters, but of her powers of fire)

    Excellent.

    047Jedah Dohma- "His visions of what's to become of the world around him is something he dwells heavily upon." ("are" instead of "is")

    Righto. "...are things upon which he dwells..."

    051Dr. Robotnik "...hands takes center stage in Sonic's adventures hereafter." (thereafter is more appropriate as the article does not expand on Sonic's adventures)

    That's the difference between "this" and "that." I'm leaving it as is.

    054Dr. Wily- "let them wreak havoc on the city of Monsteropolis in an attempt..." (I'm just curious about this, because I've never seen that name before. I haven't played a lot of the Mega Man games so...)
    It's right as is.
    056Beat- "games such as The Legend of Zelda: The Wind Waker and Sly Raccoon" (Okay, so this is a cheap nit-pick, but it's called Sly Cooper in the states and even though I know that, and anyone with a brain can figure out what it's talking about, should it be noted that it's called Sly Cooper as Jet Set Radio is also appended thusly?)
    It's fine. Ship it, as they say.
    059Earthworm Jim- "as well as Jim's own voice" (As well as supplying Jim's own...)
    You're right, that works better.
    060Dracula- "relishing bloodthirsty fangs and piercing eyes" (Sounds like he likes vampires instead of being one. Replace with something more like "known for his bloodthirsty...")
    I think "relishing" probably was meant to be "brandishing" or "flourishing." I changed it to "brandishing."
    062Karin Kanzuki- "One must get the hand of these combos to be effective with Karin." ("hang" instead of "hand")
    Yep.
    -"Using her family power she tracks down the roving Sakura and does eventually emerge the victor" (It implies that she inherited some sort of tracking power. Not sure how to fix it though)
    I think it's "family's power" or, more clearly, "family's influence." Changed.
    064Mario (kart)- "Mario has starred in his own kart racing series since 1992, and has since continued as a strong venture of the Mario franchise." ("...since 1992, one that has continued...")
    Yes.
    065Snake-"his track record on missions has earned himself a reputation." (should just be "him" instead of "himself")

    -"Snake is a clone of who is said to be the greatest soldier in the 20th century," (of the man said to be...)

    Yes.
    068Squall Leonhart-"Sporting a fur-trimmed leather jacket, a gunblade on his shoulder" (stylistic choice, but I feel like it should be "sporting a fur-trimmed leather jacket and a gunblade on his shoulder...")
    Yes.
    Quick note. Aeris"...and to escape their clutches she enlists Cloud as her bodyguard in exchange for a date. And so Aeris Gainsborough joins the story of Final Fantasy VII."

    (I think the "and so" can be dropped, and potentially replaced by "thus" or some other word. The reason is because there are two "and" modified sentences really close together.)

    Changed to "thus."
  4. Are we really publishing this part of the Dan Hibiki bio? It's misogynist. I know it wasn't meant that way, but it shouldn't be part of official writing.

    Two bitch-slaps in one heralds Dan's first appearance, his status as both a parody and a weak character exploited in later games.
    I replaced "two bitch-slaps in one" with "two of Capcom's taunts in one". We could do "two middle fingers in one" if you like, or something else.

    EDIT: I finished my uploading. All of the bios are now on the site (yippEE!). I gave each short Darkstalker bio a redirect page with its mascot number. The extended Darkstalkers bios have no redirect page. All of the links made from the word "Darkstalkers" now link to the Darkstalkers category page instead of the Darkstalkers article, which is still present in the bios list. I removed the "[[Category:Mascots]]" tag from the Darkstalkers category page, so the link to it no longer appears in the Mascots category page.

  5. That's the nature of the beast. Deal with it. :lol:
    Nitpicks are what we're all about. ;-)

    All right.

    "But she's happier for his health and durability than her garden's. She's aware that the Turks, scouts of the Shinra megacorporation, are seeking her out again, and to escape their clutches, she enlists Cloud as her bodyguard in exchange for a date."

    The first sentence misuses the word "but" because there isn't a clear contrary statement preceding it. The possesive at the end of this sentence is awkward. The last comma of the second sentence should be omitted.

    "This sensitive spirituality is shown primarily through Aeris's battle defenses, which include healing, status-cleansing, and even shielding Cloud's party from onslaughts, blessed from the ground up."

    The last phrase doesn't make grammatical sense. It isn't clear what is blessed.

    Time and again, Weltall is proven to be almost a part of Fei in how extensively it is tied to and influences his fate.

    Why use the passive voice when it's unnecessary? It should be "Weltall is almost a part..."

    I agree with you, Polo, on all of your other responses.

  6. As I read the new composer and system profiles, I noticed something potentially misleading.

    Below is an alphabetical listing of the 13 game(s) we have on record that this composer contributed to (view sortable list).

    To me the words "on record" have the same connotation as the words "as far as we know." It isn't clear that the records are ultimately defined by which remixes are on the site, and the casual reader might think "hey, this site is pretty with it; their records probably include a complete listing of this composer's game projects"

    The same issue is present in the system pages to an even greater extent:

    We have 113 composer(s) on record for this system (view all). By number of games on record for each composer, the most active are:

    This implies that a composer's "activity" is dependent on how many games in OCR's records she has worked on. If the casual reader makes the very easy but inaccurate assumption that OCR's records are complete representations of the composer's corpus of work--instead of a list of which games have had their music remixed and passed through the judges panel--they will have a distorted view of that composer.

  7. Progress report.

    I'm halfway done uploading my bios. Everything looks fine so far.

    I added "Jon Talbain" and "Jon Talbain (extended)" to a special Darkstalkers category, and I added The Coop's "Darkstalkers" piece to that category page. I then, just for experiment, marked that page as being in the Mascots category, which made the Mascots category page show a link to the Darkstalkers category page, calling it a "subcategory." We don't have to keep that there: it looks kind of ugly and is not very useful. At any rate, the "Darkstalkers" piece is still on the wiki as a bio, and it is also there as category page text.

    I clarified the "Pictured from:" fields in both the Zelda and Solid Snake bios--as each of these bios is associated with two pictures apiece--saying "Game Title (as mascot #000)" instead of just "Game Title(#000)." The redirect notification makes these notes clear to anyone coming to the bio through the mascot image: "Redirected from OCR_Mascot_000."

    I changed the Mario and the Mario (kart) bios a little; I integrated the links between them into the text of the bios. So whereas "Mario" had no link to "Mario (kart)", I made such a link out of the word "racing" in the Mario text. And whereas "Mario (kart)" had a very explicit link to "Mario" before the text of the bio, I removed that and linked to the Mario bio through the first mention of the word "Mario." Take a look, tell me if it looks like it won't work.

    Still standing by on what to do about redirect pages for the Darkstalkers bios. As I think of it, I wonder if we really need redirect pages for the extended bios. I assume that we only need a redirect page when a user clicks on the mascot picture, so as to use the mascot name to direct her browser to the correct bio. But we don't want anyone to go straight from a mascot picture to an extended bio, so perhaps there's no need for a redirect page for those, and therefore no problem to resolve.

  8. I still don't know which pages to redirect towards, respectively, the "Darkstalkers" bio and the extended versions of the Darkstalkers characters' bios. As yet there is no Darkstalkers category.

    I'll upload my bios presently, omitting redirects for the aforementioned bios until Larry tells me what to do.

  9. Yeah, thank you, Larry.

    There is a potential problem: the Darkstalkers overview and the extended Darkstalkers bios have no page that redirects to them, so I can't link to their redirect pages. Which picture should be associated with the former, if any? And how will we get the picture to appear for the extended bios if we don't use redirect pages?

    EDIT: Once we get that question cleared up, I think I have all of my markup done, and I can post all 50-some of my bios.

  10. The bottom line though is this'll be out when we're done uploading and cross-checking what we have in our hands NOW.

    Okay. We'll finishing marking up and uploading what we have right now, and we will change the credits later. The people who haven't forwarded their wishes only wrote a few bios in total, so it won't be to much work to change them one by one.

    I think you all saw me credit myself as Alex Stuart (Linearity), but I'll make it clear now that I want to be credited that way in all of my articles.

    Also, I'm sure you noticed the new Guilty Gear X mix posted, so be sure to upgrade Sol Badguy's GGX appearance like this (if you haven't already):

    === Dreamcast ===

    *[http://www.ocremix.org/game/guilty-gear-x-dc/ ''Guilty Gear X''] (2000)

    Fixed.

    Should there be an italicized notice about the main / related article called "Mega Man X" (like in the Mario (kart) bio or the Samus bios)? It could be something like:

    ''For more information, consult the '''[[Mega Man X]]''' bio.''

    Not a bad idea. I linked the first mention of "X," but that's only one letter and is harder to see than other first mention links. I'll put a clearer link in like the one you have there. On that note, all of the Darkstalkers bios link to extended bios. Should I similarly link the extended bios back to the short bios? I thought not, because the extended bios already say what the short bios say, right?

    Also, is it "Selected Game Appearances" or "Selected game appearances"? I've been doing the latter because the Toyota Supra has it that way.

    You're right. I will fix that straight away.

  11. Okay, so I looked in the Mascots category to find X's full armor bio uploaded. Its name is "Mega Man X (full armor)" instead of "X (full armor)." So either the original bio should be titled "Mega Man X" to match, or we should ask Larry to delete / change the name of the article to match the game + instructions' opinions.

    That was me. I moved the article to "X (full armor)" now that I have your support in doing so. We should avoid creating pages that we don't plan to keep; I can't manage to return the "Mega Man X (full armor)" to its original state, rather only to a blank page. I apologize for that.

    Therefore, whoever is responsible for the X bio should post it as "X" not as "Mega Man X."

  12. Didn't Polo mention giving everyone a month to respond to the inquiry about real names? I figured that the final project release would be on hold until then.

    How do we know what chez dogulov's wishes are? He has posted only three times on the forums and there isn't a real name on his profile. If we're not asking him how he would like to be credited, we should preserve his privacy and credit him only as chez dogulov.

    Edit: Another issue: the title of the article about the main character of Mega Man X is currently "Mega Man X." However, I played the hell out of that game as a kid, and I remember that the character was referred to exclusively as "X." While in later games he may have been occasionally called "Mega Man X," I am sure that he is predominantly called just "X" throughout the series. Dafydd's "Mega Man X (full armor)" bio also refers to the character only as "X," but as it stands, it will require an absolute URL instead of a wiki link, because I need to link to an article called "Mega Man X." I suggest that we call that article simply "X" for consistency.

  13. The biggest difference for me is the kinds of games available in each setting. I've always loved platform games like Sonic, and they just don't make many platform games for desktops. On the other hand, I have liked a few FPS games, and most of them were made for PCs.

    A computer dedicated to running games will likely do that job better overall than a multi-role computer. That means that in general a Nintendo or a 'gaming rig' desktop is preferable to a general PC for running games well. And those gaming rigs seem like overkill to me. There's my two cents.

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