March of the Bees - First Song Attempt

[Jayhawk_er]

Hey,

This is my first attempt at a song, I'm interested in hearing my weaknesses/strengths (mostly weaknesses I'm sure) so I know what to work on, things to change, etc. This version of the song was actually made with the wimpy midi-sequencer on LittleBigPlanet 2 for the PS3 and converted into mp3 format so the quality may not be the best. I've been trying to redo the song in REAPER but I can't really replicate the sound I got on this version so I'd love to hear any criticisms!

Thanks!

http://db.tt/4aXuDDHK