Can you rate my track? (And help me?)

[FTCosta]

Hi.

I'm a self-taught guitar player who just decided to have fun with Tuxguitar. I made this piece for an  FFT-inspired tactical RPG that's been in my mind. This is the main boss track and there are a few variations of the track with different instruments depending on the specific boss. I was kinda worried this was too short, but then I checked the Undertale OST and realized maybe it's long. Sorry for the shitty quality. When I converted the file from MIDI to MP3, it got a little different. That being said, is the composition good? Would you play the game based on the soundtrack alone?

Composing this was fun and inspiring. I want to go deeper in a sense of creating a better track. Where do I go from here? Which software(s) should I use?

 

TL;DR: Rate the song and give advice on how to remix.

TIA

[germanjazzguy]

Hello,

I want to give you my opinion on your track.

first, the guitar part starts to get really dissonant around 0:55. Is this the converters fault/ done on purpose/ ...?

There is an nice change of general mood around 1:12, but the voice beginning at 1:16 (is it a flute or a distorted guitar?) again does not fit quite well in my opinion. But the other guitar samples are quite catchy.

The brass coming in at around 1:34 also uses dissonances sometimes, but in my opinion, they fit much better here. I liked this part a lot!

One last point: in my opinion, this track is not aggressive enough for being a boss track. Can you link the original source or your original MIDI ?

[germanjazzguy]

oh by the way which software / converter did you use for creating this?

[FTCosta]

Hey, thanks for the feedback.

I composed this using Tuxguitar and converted it using http://www.conversion-tool.com/midi. I didn't know any better.

As for the composition, I'm well aware of the dissonance at 0:55. It was proposital and a throwback at another track that uses the same line (like what Toby Fox did with Undertale's OST). I tried to do it on key (is that the correct term?), but I felt it was simply utterly redundant and overlapping so I did a little change.

The flute part was unintentional and I don't see what I did wrong here.

As for not being aggressive, my main idea when I was composing this is that it would be an inspiring save-the-world type of song, like Seiken's Densetsu 3 Sacrifice pt. 3 (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7xo9CgaTUi0) and Chrono Trigger's Main Theme (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g-s-VQBoUdc). But now that you've mentioned it. It really sounds too mellow.

 

Also, how do I compose a more aggresive track? You mean just a faster tempo, heavier instruments, more dissonance or a whole new composition?

 

 

Here are the original files:

 

 

MIDI file: https://www.4shared.com/file/zLJUdyFvce/O_Chefe.html

Tux file: https://www.4shared.com/file/8bA3QGbFba/O_Chefe.html

 

 

Here's also the slower variation for the Forest boss:

MIDI: https://www.4shared.com/file/AXv_cCdvce/O_Chefe_da_Floresta.html

Tux file: https://www.4shared.com/file/EEWZTMW_ba/O_Chefe_da_Floresta.html