1. work-in-progress Day Market - Upbeat Arrangement of "Night Market" from Stardew Valley

[moebius]

Hey everyone,

I'm currently going through the tracks I want to submit and giving them another pass. This is the first one I would like some feedback on:

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/yh8fr78j7oc3dwekmv374/Day-Market.mp3?rlkey=okfbgxwvlfvdnetgnbaauiob5&dl=0

Original:

Some notes: This track takes the original song and turns it into a much more upbeat version of it (hence the title). I changed the time signature for the A section to 4/4 but kept the B section in 6/8 and use metric modulation between the two sections. To keep things fresh I wrote an alternative A section for the repeat that features the two saxes playing different lines instead of playing unison.

Edited September 17 by moebius

[Hemophiliac]

Evaluation:

Checked out the latest version on discord today.  I like the vibe and I can see how the original source is ported into a more energetic and upbeat feel.

There's definitely space for more expansion and development in the arrangement here.  Consider a contrasting feel for a new section that drops the energy of the drums down and lets the listener relax for a moment.  You could even let the piano or organ take over as a lead during that, and it would really help break up the track.

I'd echo the same that was mentioned on discord by Mel Decision, try to get a live performance on the saxes if possible.

0:33 and 0:51 are spots where you switch between the 4/4 and 6/8, I'm wondering if there's a way to prep our ear for the meter changes so that the new meter doesn't feel so different when we get there.

1:27 and 1:45 is another meter change section and the same as above applies.

This really is a good start and there's a lot of potential in this idea!  I look forward to hearing more.

[Hemophiliac]

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