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Best sounding mix (in terms of balance and production) from Lucas to date. I'm here for the awesome organ work. Blues structure helps keep this one from going off the rails because it's wild and very fun. Great work!

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Evaluation: Checked out the latest version on discord today. I like the vibe and I can see how the original source is ported into a more energetic and upbeat feel. There's definitely space for more expansion and development in the arrangement here. Consider a contrasting feel for a new section that drops the energy of the drums down and lets the listener relax for a moment. You could even let the piano or organ take over as a lead during that, and it would really help break up the track. I'd echo the same that was mentioned on discord by Mel Decision, try to get a live performance on the saxes if possible. 0:33 and 0:51 are spots where you switch between the 4/4 and 6/8, I'm wondering if there's a way to prep our ear for the meter changes so that the new meter doesn't feel so different when we get there. 1:27 and 1:45 is another meter change section and the same as above applies. This really is a good start and there's a lot of potential in this idea! I look forward to hearing more.

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Evaluation: Right out the gate the first issue I notice now is how hot (loud) the hi-hats are. Imbalance between the parts are the biggest sore thumb here. The background pad is barely audible over the drums and bass. Let the melody be the loudest thing because that's what we're focusing on as the listener. The drum pattern change at 1:50 is good, but it took too long to give us some major variation in the drums. Even if you want to keep the rhythm close to what you had up to that point you should still add both small and large fills prior to help break up the monotony. More variation!! Don't get me wrong, I absolutely hear improvement in drum variation since the previous iteration. Give us more! 2:15 is a nice addition of your own (I don't recall it in the previous), the piano was unexpected but the pattern it plays is not bad. Make sure to add some reverb to the piano as well, as it's very dry right now. Still hearing some dissonances throughout the piece as well, things are just not gelling together well. Ending is abrupt and cuts-off suddenly. Doesn't feel it was supposed to be cut-off intentionally either. Couldn't hurt to also join the discord and ask for feedback, if you want live interaction and help.

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Evaluation: I do like this arrangement even if it is more conservative. I feel like there's enough going on with the arrangement to put this over the OCR bar. 1:29-1:33 is a very nice change-up and transition to the next section. Where you might run into trouble is the production side of things. The percussion is very dry with little to no reverb. 1:34-1:48 the string lead is very blurry and hard to make out the attacks of the notes because they run into each other and have slower attacks. Consider changing that to another instrument or using a different string sample (one that has more accent or articulation on the attacks). 0:18, 0:22, 0:26, 0:30 have a high pitched instrument at the top of the chord that stands out a lot. It's the flute-like sound on top of the chord. It's standing out more than I think you want it to. I'd recommend to reduce it's velocities in this opening section or consider using a little EQ to attenuate the top end of it so it's less harsh. I'd also like to recommend more variation in the drum patterns, it's mostly the same without any drum fills after 0:32. You do drop elements out here and there and reintroduce them, but that's minor variation. Give us a change! It would really help take the track to the next level. Give some thought to my suggestions, I'd like to see where this can go. Great start, very fun track!

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Something happened in the second half with the snare that's causing it to be chorusing. I start hearing it at 2:04 and through to the end. It happens on most, but not all of the snare hits after that point. Nice job adding variation to the bass and drums in various places! They definitely help and prevents the track from getting stale quickly. 1:19 and 1:28 still have some kind of distortion going on. Like I said before, it might be clipping or it could be some other distortion effect getting too hot for a moment. At this point, those minor issues could be addressed and then it's up to you to decide how much you want to add things to take this to the next-level. When I say that, I'm talking about ear candy. Melodic embellishments, additional background elements that change (like synth modulation), or anything else you can think of that will add interest to the track. Those things are not necessary, but recommended if you want to take it to the next-level.

Ah cool ok, that's my unfamiliarity with the source. I did give it a few listens before I made the post, but not enough to have it become super ingrained in my brain. I agree though, that middle section is a good contrast to the other two and should be more relaxed. Having less parts playing is a good way to achieve that.

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Definitely a good choice to contribute to the Christmas album with this source. Getting a "snow is falling vibe" from it, and that will fit perfectly. Evaluation: First thing I notice out the gates is the very blurry background pad + the reverb on one of the instruments (not sure which) are overlapping and creating background muddiness. Contrast the very wet sound of the background pads and other instruments to the drums. The drums sound very dry in comparison. There's got to be a way where you can meet in the middle between those elements so they don't feel so separate from one another. 1:19 and 1:28, possible clipping there. It might be the electric piano/bell type sound. I'd recommend adding some bigger drum fills at the end of some of the phrases. My thought on that is there could be more variation to the drums. Right now it sounds like mostly same loop every two bars for the A sections. We get a nice change-up in the middle section, 1:30-1:53 (I like how the bass takes the lead here). 2:08-2:11 is the kind of fill I was looking for earlier, but it quickly returns to the same loop again after it. It was a small injection of energy there that really helps in changing up the flow. The source has some really cool brass lines in there too, would be really neat to hear some of that line appearing somewhere. (If I missed it, please let me know!)

6.5 years since the last track...too long, give us more! The detailed synth work and interplay of variation on rhythm is superb. Very enjoyable, and it's gonna be tough to get this earworm out of my head. The chip arps are a particular stand-out for me as they seem to come out of nowhere, but feel like they belong. This track would not be the same without them. Awesome work!

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Welcome to the forums! Let's see what we have here to check out. Evaluation: The first major issue I'm noticing is the amount of reverb on the background parts. It's so wet with reverb that many of the notes are overlapping causing muddiness, even in the parts where there isn't much going on. This is the biggest issue as it is also causing some dissonance in the other parts because the reverb tail is so long. The drums are very don't vary up their pattern at all, and just keep looping. I recommend to add fills and variations or at least change the loop sometimes. I do like how you have modified the source melody. It's good to hear it broken up, and put into different places. That and the bass (watch out for bass notes that are dissonant though, picking up a couple questionable notes IE: 2:42) ones are the two major differences I'm picking up from the source. The other thing I would recommend is adding variation to your structure or add a contrasting B section. 1:08-2:13 and 2:14-3:19 are identical and feel like they are your main "A section" that represent a large amount of the source. Maybe you could add a B section in-between them or add some of your own original material there. Just a suggestion to help stir up ideas.