Does This Sound Correct?

[Uffe von Lauterbach]

I'm working on a collaboration, and I'm usually confident with my composing skills. But I need a second opinion to see if this sounds correct to anyone else. I'm using other VSTs instead of one for a piano, but for this, I'm using a piano VST for better hearing with the treble and bass. This piece of music is in E♭ minor, 5/4 time, 110 BPM. Here's what I'm asking about:

The beginning has arpeggios, and to me, when it reaches the 11 second mark, the E♭ note that starts there sounds correct, because I think the off-kilter bassline helps. But I'm wondering if it sounds correct to anyone else.

At the 29 to 31 second mark, I added notes to ascend back up to the E♭ note, because without them, it didn't sound right to me. But maybe they could work without those notes? And I understand that at the 28 second mark, the Emaj13 chord is probably an odd choice for. That's really there to leave the music unresolved. But this is something I also am wondering about. Does the Emaj13 leading into the B6/E♭ at 32 second mark sound right to you? I'm trying to figure this out. Again, the track is meant to hold tension, which is why the chords at the end of each melody aren't being resolved.

[Master Mi]

At first, the composition sounds really interesting - it reminds me somehow of atmospheric NES game soundtracks from video games like Shadowgate in a more modern version. ))

When listening less intently, nothing stands out negatively, either rhythmically or tonally.

When listening very intently, I noticed a passage that sounds slightly strange, namely the transition from minute 0:29 to 0:30 (actually almost exactly at minute 0:30).
There seems to be a dissonant note in the chord that either doesn't belong to the key or where the notes within the key form a less harmonious chord that doesn't seem to be the best choice at this point, or the notes in the chord are even neighboring notes in the key (and therefore clash tonally with each other).

Just try increasing the interval in the chord a little according to the key, or perhaps try octavating the disturbing note.

Edited 38 minutes ago by Master Mi