whoah, this sounds totally different. Doesn't even sound like the same wip anymrore.
That clicky kick is kind of annoying. Still sounds really empty. Fill it up more. Put in some lower background parts or something.
Yeah, it sounds better because it has rythm now, but my biggest beef is the fact that there's nothing but melody and there's no arrangement whatsoever here. It's just the original in different keys.