Your biggest problem is definitely the reverb, its crowding the hell out of the rest of your soundscape. I will say though that arrangement-wise, this is very reminescent of Vertex^2 stylistically, and I think you did a great job with that. Problem is, I think even with perfect production, a song of this genre wouldnt make it on here. Bemani Speedcore really is a single beat streched out and manipulated over an entire song, save for a few short breaks. I thik with some better production, this could become a nice ITG 13 footer, but its not really OCRs style.