ARRANGEMENT / INTERPRETATION
Great arragnement!
PRODUCTION
[X] Too quiet
The mix looks slightly quiet. It sounds great relative to itself, but it might sound quiet if it was played alongside other tracks with a more typical mix.
PERFORMANCE (live recorded audio/MIDI parts)
Nothing to complain about here. Great use of delays and modulation effects to create a lush sound.
STRUCTURE
[X] Pace too plodding
This is definitely a lot slower than the original. I think that's deliberate, though, so if you don't want to speed things up or give the song more energy, what you have is great.
PERSONAL COMMENTS
I really enjoyed this remix! Your even-keel arrangement gives it a reflective emotion. I noticed that there aren't any abrupt changes in the arrangement until about 1:09, when you switch the lead synth playing the melody. Keeping things that consistent and building up so slowly, along with the slower tempo, creates a relatively calming emotion for electronica and makes the arrangement very emotional.
I'm really impressed by your production! The one thing I have to say is that the song seems a little quiet. Like I mentioned about, it doesn't sound quiet with itself, but when I listened to another song from a career artist right afterwards, I could tell that your song was a little quiet in comparison. I think that if I put your song in a playlist, I would find myself increasing my volume a little just for your track, then turning it back down afterwards. There's one moment at 3:12 where the song has levels more comparable to what I'm used to. On SoundCloud's visualization of your track, it's visibly the loudest point of the song. I don't think you want to remaster the song so that the whole track is that loud, but most of your song is significatnyl quieter.