Chippychan Posted October 19, 2008 Share Posted October 19, 2008 Click here to listen! The song's skeleton is finished I just want some help with fine-tuning and anything else you guys can critic me on. xD Songs used: Love Theme Porky's theme Gentle rain memory of Mother 18 Melodies 8 melodies (from Mother) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rozovian Posted October 19, 2008 Share Posted October 19, 2008 Not familiar with these from the game, might recognize something from what's been included in SSBB or from other remixes. Break at around 0:45 is a little too long. Works well when it continues so softly, but it gets too quiet for too long. Using some soft backing pad or even just a really long reverb tail some some extra track would probably bridge it better. Continues soft and nice, but piano sounds a little mechanical. More variation in piano velocities, possibly some slight timing offsets, would humanize it. As it goes into a larger orchestral section, there's a guitar in the left channel that's mechanical and dry. Overall, the track needs a lot of velocity humanization. The long legato notes could benefit from some automation, so you have control over the sound during the legato notes. Snare rolls, snare usage overall, needs some fine-tuning. Those problems persist through the remix. The dynamic progression (the intensity progression, not the thematic or melodic) is a bit underdeveloped. It build up, pauses, continues softly, builds up, transitions, pauses, builds up, softens. A few too many instances of building up followed by pauses. The overall development should be simpler than this, tho there should of course be some development within each segment. Basically, I think you'll need to make some changes to the structure, the skeleton, or at least soften up the transition, move or rewrite some sections, possibly mix the themes together more. Aside from fixing the technical issues, I mean. This is a good example of medley-itis... which isn't a good thing. Thematically, the first 1:45 is fine, but then your transition issues start appearing. Transition around 2:50 comes pretty much without due warning, and it's stylistically a far cry form the rest of the track, making it stand out so much more. Transition out of it around 3:25 suffers from the same problem. Fixing those, or omitting them completely, might clear up the progression a bit, but it's hard to say. They break the overall pleasant sound this track has. Those softer parts are quite enjoyable, tho, even in this unrefined state. Good luck with this, chip, hope this helps. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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