Slimtoad Posted March 11, 2009 Share Posted March 11, 2009 Hi guys, I've taken what some of you have said into consideration, and came up with this newer version. It's not complete, and it will end abruptly, fading into the real ending. My main concern now is that it's too close to the source. Suggestions would be most appreciated, and anyone's welcome to collaborate. Here is Le Source: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xLFWKVtclOQ Here is Le Mix: Click here to listen to Seymour.mp3 Enjoy! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AJ-enova Posted March 11, 2009 Share Posted March 11, 2009 It was very interesting how the orchestral part at the start worked. I think you should have an ambient bit at the start as a sort of build up. At certain points of the track it feels like theres too much at once. Also you should have more of the main riff (1:16 in the original). You should have it repeat with a beat behind it and then have it at the end but slower or something Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red9 Posted March 11, 2009 Share Posted March 11, 2009 I like the start-up, but after .40 I get bored and travel to other threads. I guess what i'm saying would be some volume and sounds dynamics along the lines, even a slowdown of the tempo especially during the piano segment. Sounds very good aside from that. Definitely like it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slimtoad Posted March 12, 2009 Author Share Posted March 12, 2009 Thanks for your advice. The problem with this song is that there's so much going on, it's tough to condense the cool stuff in a meaningful way. I'll keep that in mind, though. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SplinterOfChaos Posted March 13, 2009 Share Posted March 13, 2009 It's kinda neat! I find it interesting how close you stuck to the source, but varied the instrumentation so often. The guitars aren't great. Somehow, I want to say it should be longer, but it IS already 2 and a half minutes. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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