djpretzel Posted January 26, 2004 Share Posted January 26, 2004 Hello! I've been mixing for quite a while and have a couple of songs I thought I'd submit. Although I do only have 2 songs that fit under the 6 mb limit. Anyway, this is my first song, the one that is of most importance to me. I did write a song lyric for it, but it was too long since I sang =( Please let me know when I can delete it from my server! Thanks, Theodor Berg, Sweden. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vig Posted January 26, 2004 Share Posted January 26, 2004 amateurish. the melody is too quiet, the drums are too prominent, and they dont ever vary. the synth chords are incredibly lifeless, they are just held for two measures. there is nothing going on rhythmically. also, there are some changes that really dont fit. i dont like the artistic liberties taken. this just needs more interesting rhythms and...well...better notes. NO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protricity Posted January 26, 2004 Share Posted January 26, 2004 Ah, new chords!1 Its interesting, yes, but as Vig put it, rather ameture. Go for a louder lead, less of an attack on the synth chords, more variation on drums and arrangement. The wind/rain sfx are overused. Interesting, but NO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Israfel Posted January 27, 2004 Share Posted January 27, 2004 I do rather like the bassline and it's nice that you changed up the harmony some. Although as has already been mentioned, the lead is much too quiet and the harmony lacks rhythmic interest. Fix the volume issues and maybe try to do more with the accompaniment and I think this could be pretty cool. NO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GrayLightning Posted January 27, 2004 Share Posted January 27, 2004 I love the idea behind this, but there's some execution problems here. The lead is too quiet, and there's some mixing problems here. The volume levels of the different instruments is very messed up. Better attention paid to these aspects, as well as mastering would yield significantly better results. Right now everything but the lead sounds so thick, while the lead sounds so thin. Making for an unbalanced sound. Slightly too bottom heavy also. Some eq work is in order as well. Also I think this is too loud. Everything is constantly loud. At least, make the pads a bit softer and change in dynamics. This isn't pop music. Let your music breath. Please work on this a little more and consider resubmitting, I enjoy the concepts and style of this mix. NO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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