*NO* Altelier Iris 3 & Ar Tonelico: Melody of Elemia 'When Do We Fight'

[DragonAvenger]

Hey OCRemix,

My last submission was pretty shoddy, but I think this one will do.

User Name: No Escape

Name: Chris Michalski

Email: noescape16@yahoo.com

User ID: 32645

Songs remixed: Desires and Commandments (From Atelier Iris 3), Crash! (From Atelier Iris 3), Loki (From Ar Tonelico Melody of Elemia)

I have attached my song to this e-mail. It's a pretty straightforward driving rock song. I got inspired after listening to Unholy Wars by Sixto. Although its nothing spectacular, I think I got a pretty good mix. To be honest, it's the best I can do. I used a Korg N1 for all my synth sounds, a PRS with a really strange pedal set-up for guitars, an Alesis D4 electonic set for my drums, and another strange combo of Fruity Loops and Cool Edit Pro for my recording and mixing.

Atelier Iris was composed by Ken Nakagawa while Ar Tonelico had a multitude of composers, but I believe Loki was done by Daisuke Achiwa. The links to the songs are below.

Loki- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LEoWqOqAq9A

Crash!- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M9DLWsQOKWk

Desires and Commandments- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBcxl4ZmXUk

Other information: Ar Tonelico is a standard jrpg by NIS released in 2007

Atelier Iris 3 is also a standard jrpg by NIS released in 2007

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBcxl4ZmXUk - Desires and Commandments

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M9DLWsQOKWk - Crash!

- Loki

[OceansAndrew]

This is a mix that has a few strong points, but is overall being dragged down by the details. The guitar playing is pretty good, as is the piano playing, but I never feel like the track as a whole is gelling. Transitions are a little sloppy as well, and once the track gets busier, the mixing isn't balanced, with stuff stepping all over each other. The drum sound is also really way weaker than it should be. THey need to crackle with the energy of an angry Norse God, not sound wimpy.

You are a talented instrumentalist, but your recording needs to be stepped up a little to make it onto OCR. I suggest bringing this track to the WIP forum and getting some additional tips.

No, please resubmit

[Palpable]

Wasn't feeling the intro because of the loose piano playing and weak strings. Once the guitar kicked in, this sounded better, though still not that great. The drums and accompanying synths were weaksauce and I didn't like how the drums swung but other elements did not. It made it sound like the "band" was not playing together. Overall, the guitar was the best element but nothing else was matching it. The fadeout was also in a strange place, it sounded like the song was going somewhere else when it finished. Arrangement was not bad, though the same melodies tended to get overused.

There's a lot to improve here, in sequencing and production. Better samples, better separation for your sounds, more realistic sequencing. I might spend some time listening to the Unholy Wars, trying to emulate the sounds in there better. You'll develop your production senses by doing so.

NO (resubmit)

[DragonAvenger]

Not much to add to what the gentlemen above have already said. The guitar is easily the best instrument, and really packs a lot of energy on it's own, but it gets dragged down by the various issues with the balance and blend with the other instruments. The fade-out ending also isn't really holding ground. Like Vinnie said, it feels like it's about to go somewhere else, and then just ends.

I feel like there's plenty of potential in this, but it will also take a good deal of work. I suggest definitely making use of the WIP forums to get some feedback on this and resubmitting! NO (resubmit)