FF8-Wandering Musician

[mirev]

http://www.esnips.com/displayimage.php?pid=32972109

The intro to a song I'm working on.

UPDATED:WIP:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/wandering-musician_draft

UPDATE:WIP2:

http://snd.sc/vvXTfU

11/11/11 UPDATE:

http://snd.sc/u1sf8D

MASTERING-EQ_FINAL11/12/2011:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/journeywithamachinegun

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Final Copy V2:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/jou...he-machine-gun

V1:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/jou...machine-gun-11

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Original:

[GSO]

YaY Laguna! I love it! needs more development though. can't wait to hear the finished product!

[mirev]

Updated, still needs work. Any advice or tutorials would be epically appreciated since I'm still learning even some of the basics to music production.

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/wandering-musician_draft

[GSO]

I love it except for the fact that you can't really hear any of the original melody. it almost doesn't sound like man with a machine gun. make the original melody more prevalent and you'll be set.

[mirev]

Another Update. Have to work on the flute a little.

http://snd.sc/vvXTfU

[GSO]

you're sooo close. make more of an ending and you'll be ready(I think) to have a Mod review.

[mirev]

11/11/11 UPDATE:

http://snd.sc/u1sf8D

[GSO]

set it to mod review cuz you're done lol ^0~

[mirev]

FINAL

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/journeywithamachinegun

[Monobrow]

Hey!

Okay right off the bat, I think maybe your piano writing could be a little more intimate. All the notes are kinda stabby, which is okay, but I wouldn't be afraid to change up the velocity of some notes a little bit... For patterns such as this, I've found that a piano note being really soft in contrast to it being harder a measure before adds a nuanced touch. It's already been established, therefore we expect it, therefore velocity changes don't take away from it.

Your cello/violins suffers from slow attack syndrome, I would raise the attack overall on the sample (or use a different sample) and then instead of having them come in w/ the same attack rate every note, use volume automation for your dynamics, or automate the attack etc... Volume automation can really help you, and gives you a direct influence on the dynamics of your song.

I think your highhats and drum kit honestly aren't very appropriate for the song, just too in your face, and the rest of the song is organic. Maybe go for some more dancy/ethno drum kits?

I also think the song kinda drags on a little too much before it gets interesting, it's very common though, so keep up trying to get these ideas going. What I've noticed is that when I got into music, my most interesting ideas would come very late in the song, because that is when I was really into it. So I understand why. Just work trying to not let most of the song sound like one big intro. Be ballsy earlier on.

That guitar sample is pretty bad also... If you have access to anything else I would use that instead, or maybe put some fx on it, such as slight reverb, or anything w/ distortion. Mess around with where it sits. And if you don't have any better guitar samples, I suggest a synth instead.

You start having some way cool ideas at around 4:00, such as around 4:25 I like the notes you have w/ the piano, the only thing being though, that the chords of the accompanying instruments don't match the chord your piano implies there, so work on matching them up.

So overall? Work on your piano, make everything more intimate, work on slow attack syndrome, better drums, less of an intro feel for the first half of the song, and that fake guitar. It's a nice start! Keep trying and good luck!

[mirev]

Exactly the helpful info I was looking for.

[mirev]

I didn't shorten the beginning, but I took your advice on everything else, and this is what came out of that:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/journey-with-a-machine-gun-11

I think the guitar is a big step up from before, thnx for the tip!

11-17-2011

[GSO]

Perfect!

[mirev]

Final Copy V2:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/journey-with-the-machine-gun

V1:

http://soundcloud.com/journeyjay/journey-with-a-machine-gun-11

[mirev]

Mod Review Pls?

[mirev]

I'm going to call this one done.