jordanrooben Posted March 18, 2012 Share Posted March 18, 2012 I started this song just because it was in my MIDI folder, and I wanted to mess around. As always, it's better than anything else I've made.I have two specific question regarding it however. The first is: are any of the parts muddy? I had issues with that early on, but I think I fixed the problem areas. Second, is it too repetetive, or not structured enough? Version 1: http://soundcloud.com/jordanrooben/teknut-deku-nut-palace Version 2: http://soundcloud.com/jordanrooben/teknut-deku-nut-palace-version -Fixed the muddy bass -Made the lead louder -Changed the parts for a more cohesive (A-B-Bridge-A-B-AA-C) structure -Added a better ending Version 3: http://soundcloud.com/jordanrooben/teknut-deku-nut-palace-1 -MOAR BASS -Less lead instrument variation for an even more cohesive structure Version 4: http://soundcloud.com/jordanrooben/teknut-deku-nut-palace-2 -Brought out the nearly inaudible drums to an audible level -Changed the structure to: Intro-Verse-Chorus-Verse-Chorus-Bridge-Chorus-Chorus-Coda Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ethan Rex Posted March 19, 2012 Share Posted March 19, 2012 Its hard to hear the melody sometimes in the beginning. Its a little muddy on the bass side. Its not repetitive (or at least i don't think so). In fact, it seems sporadic; there's some transitional issues that make it lack cohesion. The ending is pretty weak as well. Good luck Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jordanrooben Posted March 20, 2012 Author Share Posted March 20, 2012 Its hard to hear the melody sometimes in the beginning. Its a little muddy on the bass side. Its not repetitive (or at least i don't think so). In fact, it seems sporadic; there's some transitional issues that make it lack cohesion. The ending is pretty weak as well.Good luck Fixed those issues (At least, I hope so). I put the link in the first post. Take a look, and enjoy! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tesselode Posted March 20, 2012 Share Posted March 20, 2012 The song feels pretty random. The instrumentation switches up so much it's hard to find a pattern. This probably has a lot to do with the fact that the original song is kind of random and the melodies aren't very distinct, so this song might be better if more things stayed the same to hold the song together. Also, I feel like everything is going on in the low-mid to mid frequencies, and there's not much bass, so it feels like there's holes in the song. Or it could just be that there's sub-bass that I can't hear with my speakers. Mainly you should create a really obvious structure for the song to hold together the rather random source material. I do like the glitchy stuff you have going on, and the instruments do sound good, so good job on that. Hopefully I'm not sounding completely negative. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jordanrooben Posted March 20, 2012 Author Share Posted March 20, 2012 The song feels pretty random. The instrumentation switches up so much it's hard to find a pattern. This probably has a lot to do with the fact that the original song is kind of random and the melodies aren't very distinct, so this song might be better if more things stayed the same to hold the song together.Also, I feel like everything is going on in the low-mid to mid frequencies, and there's not much bass, so it feels like there's holes in the song. Or it could just be that there's sub-bass that I can't hear with my speakers. Mainly you should create a really obvious structure for the song to hold together the rather random source material. I do like the glitchy stuff you have going on, and the instruments do sound good, so good job on that. Hopefully I'm not sounding completely negative. Usually, I don't like to reply before I release a new version, but I'll make an exception. I'm listening to the mix now, and I did overlook the bass. Though, overlook isn't entirely accurate. I started with the bass actually. I took it out throughout the mix for buildup. I'll work on it. Thanks for the compliments also. And no, you're not being too negative. I'd sooner have good constructive feedback that's negative than something positive I can't work with. Thanks! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jordanrooben Posted March 21, 2012 Author Share Posted March 21, 2012 New Version! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crossing Posted March 21, 2012 Share Posted March 21, 2012 It's not bad, in fact I mostly like it, except for two things: 1. Still very random/mixed up/spontaneous. I'm not saying you shouldn't have variation, just, making it progress in a more structured way may help. 2. (minor) it sounds like the first little glitchy sound (around :08 in) is kind of loud? It sounded a little like clipping to me, at least. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jordanrooben Posted March 21, 2012 Author Share Posted March 21, 2012 New version! If this doesn't fix the structure issues the song has been having, then I probably just don't understand what's wrong with it. Enjoy! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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