Snes Fzero Silence remix

[Dumbluck07]

I Was just wondering if I could get some feedback on the remix im working on.

UPDATE I tried to fix it, does this sound any better? feedback woould be appreciated

https://soundcloud.com/limberturtle/fzero-silences

Edited August 3, 2014 by Dumbluck07

[Rozovian]

There's some nice sounds and good ideas in here, but you don't seem to know what to do with them. For example, you have a really nice buildup that goes nowhere, just hits a high point at 0:12. You have a nice, sparse, relaxed bit at 0:25. The arp backing in the B-part (0:38) is cool. You just seem to have missed the part about arranging these cool ideas into something that flows well and makes sense to the listener.

[Dumbluck07]

There's some nice sounds and good ideas in here, but you don't seem to know what to do with them. For example, you have a really nice buildup that goes nowhere, just hits a high point at 0:12. You have a nice, sparse, relaxed bit at 0:25. The arp backing in the B-part (0:38) is cool. You just seem to have missed the part about arranging these cool ideas into something that flows well and makes sense to the listener.

Thanks I can never seem to get the song to make sense. Im at a loss but ill keep working on it

UPDATE

https://soundcloud.com/limberturtle/fzero-silences does this sound any better

Edited August 3, 2014 by Dumbluck07

[timaeus222]

seems private.