Kirby and the Amazing Mirror - Opening Theme

[Nav]

Can I have some feedback on this?

It is intelligent drum and bass/jungle. A major influence was Omni Trio, with his style of break and chords.

My main issue was how the melody was in 3 bar phrases, and I needed to convert them to 4 bar. After that, the remix and my own melodies seamlessly combine.

Feedback is really appreciated. I usually get rejected, for one reason or another, but this time, before I submit, I want to know what you guys think.

http://www.vgmusic.com/music/console/nintendo/gba/mirror_opening.mid - The midi.

http://media.putfile.com/Kirby-and-the-Amazing-Mirror---Opening - The remix.

Thanks guys!

[The Derrit]

I honestly think this is very professionally done. Part of this is that I know Omni Trio pretty well and it sounds very much like their work, which is a plus in my book. But also, the influence of the midi is heard but not overwhelming; I think it is well personalized. It seems really good to me, I honestly don't have a whole lot of comment for you other than some of it seems to repeat itself; it could use more variation in parts. Also, small technical issue, the echo at the begninning of the song isn't really on pace with the rest of the tune, and was a bit jarring, but is probably not that hard to fix. Other than that, I'm a big fan! Good luck with this.

[Radiowar]

yeah definitely got an omni trio sound to this. deceptively simple. not sure if it would pass though, the judges might say it's too repetitive. I think it's great, though I'm not so sure about that crash at the end.

[Nav]

I honestly think this is very professionally done. Part of this is that I know Omni Trio pretty well and it sounds very much like their work, which is a plus in my book. But also, the influence of the midi is heard but not overwhelming; I think it is well personalized. It seems really good to me, I honestly don't have a whole lot of comment for you other than some of it seems to repeat itself; it could use more variation in parts. Also, small technical issue, the echo at the begninning of the song isn't really on pace with the rest of the tune, and was a bit jarring, but is probably not that hard to fix. Other than that, I'm a big fan! Good luck with this.

Thanks for the advice! Yeah, I got that beginning echo fixed.

Variation-wise, it was meant to be more of a "drift-off" kind of song rather than a song meant to be actively listened to. I hope you know what I mean. I guess I could add maybe a panning lfo or two to spice it up a bit!

Also, Omni Trio is actually a single person! Weird, I know.

yeah definitely got an omni trio sound to this. deceptively simple. not sure if it would pass though, the judges might say it's too repetitive. I think it's great, though I'm not so sure about that crash at the end.

The crash, eh? I guess I can turn it into a fade-out instead. I hope they don't say it's too repetitive.

I'm going to submit this, with the edits you guys mentioned. Thanks for the help!

Edit: http://media.putfile.com/Nav---Kirbys-Mystical-Mirror is the final submission.

[The Derrit]

Haha yeah I know, its just grammatically difficult to say "Omni Trio is" as opposed to are. My mind won't let me :_(