Good feedback!
At first, I wasn't planning on adding any percussion to it at all because it was going to be more like meditation music. It wasn't meant to be very dynamic. I threw percussion in there anyway, and I admit, it turned out pretty lazy and uninspired (which is probably why it sounds like it doesn't fit). I scrapped the percussion for now. Also, I decided not to submit it since this is more of a "remake" than a "remix" and I want to stick as close to the original as I can.
However, I do have another idea for a low-fi/hip-hop version (an actual remix) that will be more dynamic and hopefully more acceptable according to OCR standards. So, there will likely be multiple versions of this song.
This one is going back to the drawing board.