this would be "simply telling you why" my "track is not very good at this point, and some measures that might be taken to help it out"
Too much reverb on the snare/clap. Overall "hip hop beat" is really really dull, dry, boring, simplistic, ect. Not trying to sound negative, just being honest. There's absolutely no groove, funk, or motion. Although I don't listen to that much hip hop, I think there's really not much about your loop sequencing that makes it really stand out or qualify as hip hop. I'm just trying to picture rap lyrics, or perhaps imagine this theme being played at a club... and it's... just... not... working...
There's also a substantial amount of clipping--that's gotta go. Pretty novice production at this point, you need to address that. The main thing I would suggest are completely rebuilding your drum loops from the ground up. Kill the reverb. Pay attention to the volume on individual one-shots. Good luck.
but, If you're trying to belittle me or what I DO, then whatever. If you're just making jokes and normally a prick, then its cool.