I'm not sayin' that mine was a winner either, but I have to agree with most of these people. Some advise that I had been given by plenty of people (and I finally found how to do it right) is to make it sound more real, even if it's all electronic you still need that realistic kind of sound with each instrument, and I don't see that you had that. Plus, come on, that voice sample really wasn't needed, it really took away from my interest in the piece.