Thanks for the review, it's really helpful.
The original solo bit was different in fact a bit longer, so I picked the bits I liked and kept those. I don't think the pitch bends sound "randomly" placed to me, they're still in time. However I'm not sure the idea of that segment is to progress anywhere. I personally enjoy long solos in tracks after establishing a nice groove. They don't go anywhere but they're fun and indulgent to listen to. The difference here is I'm not very good, but I guess I'd like to try do those things that I like. The second half of the middle section that follows the solo is where it is intended to progress somewhere, since that takes the background arpeggio and builds up with it. I'm not sure I can hear this at all, they don't sound muddy to me although maybe 1) you have a better ear. 2) you have a better speaker/headphone system that reveals things I can't hear. It sounds OK to me on my headphones, speakers and hi-fi. Again it doesn't sound like this to me. But as a note on the mixing, I've tried looking at various tracks that I like to see what their waveform looks like and maybe get a glimpse at their mixing. A lot of the tracks I like seem to have quite prominent cymbols and hi-hats etc in the mix, that counter the bassy low sound of the rest of it, but maybe they could be reigned in a tad. The cymbols are mostly annoying because the samples are quite bad, or not quite right.Most of tracks I look at actually just go ahead and limit. I tried to take the queue of one track by applying a hard limit just to shave off the very top and hopefully prevent any distortion but after converting to MP3 that gets changed and it does distort. Not sure how I can accurately convert it over so this doesn't happen.
If I can get my new FL Studio install to ready my VSTs then I'll give it another edit for sure.