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Without commenting the sound quality since my current headphones might be deceiving, I say this definitely needs those vocals and it's apparent you've written some parts with the idea of vocals there in mind (like 0:33 onwards). Plus, the bass track sounds a bit silly without the vocals. The rhythms are pretty nice. Melodies remind me a bit of the band "Pain" (maybe you've heard of it). Similar vocal style would work best here as well I believe.

I got the feeling that the song might be a bit too repetitive (at least for my tastes), because the opening melody and all of its variants are heard so many times in the song (though I'll admit I skipped a lot after the first minute to see if this was true). I would toss some of the parts where the melody is played, and maybe try to create a whole new, distinct chorus part to fill the space.

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Without commenting the sound quality since my current headphones might be deceiving, I say this definitely needs those vocals and it's apparent you've written some parts with the idea of vocals there in mind (like 0:33 onwards). Plus, the bass track sounds a bit silly without the vocals. The rhythms are pretty nice. Melodies remind me a bit of the band "Pain" (maybe you've heard of it). Similar vocal style would work best here as well I believe.

I got the feeling that the song might be a bit too repetitive (at least for my tastes), because the opening melody and all of its variants are heard so many times in the song (though I'll admit I skipped a lot after the first minute to see if this was true). I would toss some of the parts where the melody is played, and maybe try to create a whole new, distinct chorus part to fill the space.

Pain one of my favorite bands) As for repetitive.. You right! It is. But it doesn't bother me at all. This song(i hope it will be a song), going to be in album(11-13 tracks). So I think theres no need to make it super-awesome, changing melody or sections or whatever. Some quality upgrade + good vocals and this track will be good, I think.. But maybe I'm gonna cut intro and rerecord bass guitar in closer future.

Thank you for giving this shit your time guys!:)

P.S. Read my sig, just in case.

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