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A few thoughts on this track:

The intro leaves a lot to be desired. You have that melody and a pad, then it stops and begins again with a drum beat. The piece would be better off to start at around 1:44.

The melody you have in that section starting at about 50 seconds and especially around 1:14 is really bad. A lot of very dissonant intervals, the phrasing is weak and it doesn't work together with your harmony.

I also think your choice of synth tones isn't quite up to par with the original.

The main thing that needs work here in my opinion, is the composition

  • 2 weeks later...
Posted (edited)
link is dead

on the other hand

WHAT IS LOVE

BABY DON'T HURT ME

DON'T HURT ME

NO MORE

Done. It should work now.

Edited by Necrox

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