pokemoneinstein Posted May 15, 2014 Share Posted May 15, 2014 (edited) https://soundcloud.com/colinsm/sky-garden-v3 So I just got Hollywood Brass and I started working on Sky Garden, from Mario Kart Super Circuit. I love this theme It's a WIP, and the arrangement is obviously too conservative to be posted on OCR. But that aside, what do you guys think? Edited May 24, 2014 by pokemoneinstein Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pokemoneinstein Posted May 24, 2014 Author Share Posted May 24, 2014 (edited) Sorry for the double post, but it's finished, I do believe. Still a pretty conservative arrangement, but I like where it's come. What do you guys think? What else could I do in terms of production? Edited May 25, 2014 by pokemoneinstein Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bowlerhat Posted May 26, 2014 Share Posted May 26, 2014 There are some really weird emphases throughout the whole remix, especially on the euphoniums (I think that's what they are, I'm not sure though.) For example in the very beginning on the sixth note on the melody (the f). It's accented louder than the rest of the notes in the melody even though it's in the middle of the musical sentence. I don't know if it's on purpose, but it happens a few times in the remix, but quite consistently. The trumpets are pretty highpitched. They don't have any body, and sound muted. That is fine when it's used for the trumpetsignals, but especially at the later half of the remix it could be a little more wah-ish. Like the trombones. Right now they don't have a backbone, which is a loss when they are used in the mainmelody. There's a very pretty, floating ambience at the chorus. It's really cool, but when you repeat it a second time for the climax it's actually a little too pretty. It's only a little bit more epic than the first time. You could at more percussion, and you should definitely make the current percussion more apparent. For example the snare. But I still really liked it. Great job! I was thinking of covering this song myself as well, but I don't think that is necessary anymore. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pokemoneinstein Posted May 26, 2014 Author Share Posted May 26, 2014 Thanks for the feedback! I definitely see what you're saying. I think part of the lack of "backbone" is because I started out arranging this song a whole step lower, and when I finished, I decided it needed to sound a little more triumphant, so i transposed it up. Much appreciated! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Touchstone Posted June 14, 2014 Share Posted June 14, 2014 This entire thing just need a little more flesh to it. I don't know why, but I would like it to, I don't know, be louder, have more oomph. Also, it kinda just leads off in the end. A more concise, and defined, ending would make it a lot better. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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