Chimpazilla Posted March 27, 2015 Share Posted March 27, 2015 (edited) NOTE: This song is a part of the upcoming OCRemix FF3 Album. Contact Information Your ReMixer name: begoma Your real name: Kary Brown Your email address: Your website: http://www.karybrown.com Your userid: 50412 Submission Information Final Fantasy III Ur Town My Home Town Composer: Nobuo Uematsu As rap/hip hop is pretty under-represented here (and the other two songs I am posted on have rap in them) I wanted to keep that going. I love the original baseline of this song so I wanted to play with it a bit and make it a main feature. Other than that I just wrote down the lyrics that popped into my head as I listened to the original track. I also knew I wanted to throw some guitar harmony in to maintain the epic sound. All in all I just wanted to make a remix that could pump you up to go out on an adventure. I'd also like to update my remixer profile picture if possible (Attached): -------------------------------------------------------------- Edited April 22, 2015 by Liontamer closed decision Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chimpazilla Posted March 27, 2015 Author Share Posted March 27, 2015 I love the concept of this, very cute and upbeat! The vocals sound really good and I like the lyrics. But I really don't like the rhythm guitar panned all the way to the left, and that repetitive hat and also the crash panned all the way right, snare all the way on the left. I mean, why? Also the bassline is very quiet and the bass timbre isn't knocking my socks off, it doesn't seem to fit. The vocals are great here, but the rest of the track I feel needs some adjustment and improvement. The drums are really very drab and repetitive. There are a couple of sour notes here and there as well, mostly in the final section where the guitar is the lead. I hope this can be fixed up! NO (resubmit) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emunator Posted March 28, 2015 Share Posted March 28, 2015 Gah, this is killing me! Your vocals and concept is sooooo good, but the rest of the backing track is just not up to par. The odd panning on the guitars/drums, repetitive backing writing, and the poor-fitting bass patch is bringing this down. I'm also hearing some distortion/overcompression on the lead guitar and organ when it pops in. I think this needs another pass at mixing and working with the rest of the track, but it definitely deserves the extra attention because the vocals and guitar performance is so great here! Love what you've done with the source, too. Bring in a collaborator if you need to, just do what it takes to get this where it needs to be, it'd be a crime to not revisit this awesome idea NO (resubmit!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Liontamer Posted April 22, 2015 Share Posted April 22, 2015 I love the concept of this, very cute and upbeat! The vocals sound really good and I like the lyrics. But I really don't like the rhythm guitar panned all the way to the left, and that repetitive hat and also the crash panned all the way right, snare all the way on the left. I mean, why? Also the bassline is very quiet and the bass timbre isn't knocking my socks off, it doesn't seem to fit. The vocals are great here, but the rest of the track I feel needs some adjustment and improvement. The drums are really very drab and repetitive. There are a couple of sour notes here and there as well, mostly in the final section where the guitar is the lead. I hope this can be fixed up! Quoting Chimpazilla because she nailed it, the good and the bad: while the arrangement's clearly strong, the panning makes no sense; the percussion patterns (while creative) repeat too much for too long; the bassline tone doesn't sound bad but doesn't quite click. Emunator mentioned the electric guitar; that wasn't a huge deal for me, but you'll have to watch the levels there. 2:05-2:19 was probably the worst offender IMO once the drums splashed in; that combination was possibly lightly distorting; at the very least, the soundscape got very cramped. I'll also say, the vocals could use some additional sweetening/tightening up; they're OK, and I'm a fan, but there's some minor pitch issues that may need some Auto-Tune or another take to smooth out (e.g. "sea-son"/1:02). Right now, the vocals are pretty exposed, so when there's some subtle strain or the smoothness is not quite there (e.g. "no matter where I roam"/1:16-1:23), it's pretty apparent. Hopefully it's clear this is very promising, Kary, so definitely see if you can tweak this before the FF3 album drops. Pretty good so far, so I hope we get another version. NO (resubmit) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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