GSO Posted September 24, 2019 Share Posted September 24, 2019 (edited) Dirge de Serge WIP.mp3Sources: ...I HATE feeding the stupid dragons in Viper Manor...ugh... Edited December 7, 2019 by GSO Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Souperion Posted September 27, 2019 Share Posted September 27, 2019 (edited) I like the sources, and agree that they could make a sweet piano solo. I'd suggest focus on amping the emotional force of this piece with dynamics, with varying velocity on the individual notes to make it more alive. As a an amateur pianist, I would feel a little bored with the performance of this, though a conservative arrangement isn't bad in and of itself. Might I suggest a couple piano mixes from the site for study? kLuTz's 600 A.D. in Piano and Pyro Paper Plane's Lone Star. It's hard to make a programmed piano sound alive like these, but studying them could really help. Good luck with this piece! Edited September 27, 2019 by Souperion Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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GSO Posted October 14, 2019 Author Share Posted October 14, 2019 Fixes: color variation humanization mic position added silence lead in no comp eq band dynamics Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GSO Posted October 15, 2019 Author Share Posted October 15, 2019 I think I got it: Let me know what you think! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Souperion Posted October 17, 2019 Share Posted October 17, 2019 It certainly feels a fair bit more alive and less stock-like. I'm noticing some jarring notes here and there, especially during the first minute and a half. I'd suggest looking over where you are putting the emphasis (extra velocity) and balance it out ever so slightly. I'm still an amateur at the craft myself, and there are a LOT of subtle nuances to figuring out how to make a piece like this feel living. But I think you are on the right track. Try making the emphasis variation a bit more subtle to avoid those blaring parts (EX: right at 38, the high note, right at 44, right at 49.) If it still feels like the particular part needs some emphatic statement, try making it a chord or some other ornamentation. Study some piano solos for ideas. I'd suggest a few: JJT's The Flood Plain, Jormungand's Dark Star Scherzo, and jdaster64's Cocoa 'n' Cookies. You're getting somewhere with this, keep at. GSO 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GSO Posted October 18, 2019 Author Share Posted October 18, 2019 Some re edits: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GSO Posted December 7, 2019 Author Share Posted December 7, 2019 Done & Done: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Souperion Posted December 14, 2019 Share Posted December 14, 2019 It's progressing and notably better than it was 3 months ago. Keep mixing and mastering, every piece you invest in is a good learning experience. One other thing: please do not post/bump 17 pieces within a one week period. I can identify with the desire to get feedback and direction on pieces, and it's great that you're using the forum for it's intended purpose. The problem is that when you throw a bunch of content out at once, it can come across as spam and annoying, dissuading people from giving your tracks a good listen. Sometimes, a piece just slips through the cracks here, which I can identify with. But keep mixing and bringing songs for review, and give the feedback some time. I've had to wait weeks for some of the best critique's I've gotten here. Keep at it, GSO. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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