people don't respond unless alot of people viewed it, ill contribute tho cause i've been there. the mike has too much high frequnecies, in order for this to be accepted, it has to have a melody of a vg. Anyway, the sylables (i can't spell) seem really forced to fit, your rapping lacks true emotion and i think that's what sells records. the beat isn't bad, and the end seems really ignorant, kinda like people cant have opinions on what seems to be your art. Also, the vocals are incredibley dry, most tracks ive heard have the vocals filled with effects and equalizers. In all honesty, i never really liked rap with a very few exceptions, but this song just isn't for me. Im sorry, but i think you should retool.